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Wasteland
By PeterThomas
23 March 2005
This was inspired by the awful lonliness I felt after a long and hard break-up. There were things I wish I'd never said, places I wish I'd never gone, people I wish I'd never met. But I did. And now - as I come through the other side - I can see the wasteland I so very nearly entered into...


Are you the little poet?

Words trickle from the leaky faucet of my mouth.

Unprotected.

Unadulterated.

Unaccustomed.

I never meant to say those things to you,

But I did.

I want to take them back.

 

I see ‘forever' is just a word poets use to measure their pain.

Rhyme by lingering rhyme.

And their hearts keep measure to the languid sorrows of the mind.

Tear by brutal tear.

 

If God would only spare me this trial,

Framed by ghosts and memories,

I would smile.

Because there would be hope.

 

But instead I am here,

Scrawled across this wasteland of our love;

Saluting the dead, the loathed and the lost,

As the future rots in the palm of my hand.

 

I don't remember sunlight.

Not in the way it should be.

Everything feels cold and lifeless to me,

And Earth's cold, blue lips press against my skin.

The little poet has come home.

 

And he steps into darkness.

 

 

 

Scream?

Him

Hear

You

Can

Reviews
Hmmmmm
Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 30th March 2005
Interesting style. Makes the reader work for it. 
 
spidey
courage
Written by ailbhe (6 comments posted) 26th April 2005
It's a little brave to call a poem 'Wasteland' post-Eliot! But I like this. I like the slackness of the leaky faucet image - words dribbling unchecked out of your mouth. I think in the fourth stanza you might get a little carried away - "the wasteland of our love" puts me off a bit - I see you declaiming it from a mountain-top. I prefer poems to be quieter, to whisper in my ear. But I do like the imagery and playfulness.

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