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All life came from the sea |
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By andybyers
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31 July 2007 |
Inspired by a recent moment at a family funeral.
the blue-grey of my father's eyes
is warship steel, but
a drop
from a salty sea hangs in sorrow
from his eyelashes
put there by the storm
of his sister's eulogy|
Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 31st July 2007 | The metaphor is good, and there's a rythm. So it works  | excellent -
Written by fellpony (1704 comments posted) 31st July 2007 | excellent - nice, sharp observation and a fine feeling for the right language.
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Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 1st August 2007 | Liked this very much. It says just enough and leaves the rest for the reader.
'Sharp' about says it all.
Phil. |
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