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I Slit My Brains
By andybyers
01 August 2007
Kind of followed this one where it led.  It happens that way sometimes.

The house has almost finished
    painting me on the inside
    and good, because I have lost all skills
    to live in the forest
        Nothing grows in me now
A rare thing walks into sight,
    the tin him that in truth
    much respects you.
    Given a siphon to lower the smoke,
        he grows bored with my confessions:
        Nothing grows in me now

I'm not invited to the wedding
    That neither fails me, nor do I deserve it
    It's just knowledge I manage,
        a brilliant product,
        a week of concerns never boxed, sent, presented
A good day is decided at high levels,
        designed in the absence of thought,
        bequeathed in ignorance
The trees close ranks
    Nothing grows in me now.

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Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 1st August 2007
Can't pretend to understand all of this but love the ideas and imagery. 'A good day is decided at high levels' love this - sounds good, absolves us of responsibility and yet empowers with that special acceptance of strange inevitablity that some days bring. 
Hope that makes some sense. 
What I want to convey is that I like this one too, despite the sense of foreboding contained within. 
 
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