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A Toast To Them
By madeupname
03 August 2007
Shamrocks engraved in the wooden doors,
To match the symbols on the concrete floors,
As the chairs scrape and scratch away at its face,
I marvel how it seems to hold together this place.

But the smoking fire which lights the room,
Just delays the coming of certain gloom,
When the whiskey's flow is dried again,
And soberness floods in with the past's dull pain.

Old men sit and pass the time,
Smoking pipes, recall mythsand rhymes,
'Bout the olden days, so pure and good,
When life was lived as God determined it should.

They the remainder of the ancient roots,
We merely results of their tree bearing fruits,
They dug down deep to take hold of the land,
Through rock and stone with bleeding hands.

 Now in upturned fertile soil we lie,
Watered with the tears the women cried,
To watch their men need fight and beat,
Each acre and mountain to admit defeat.

So I raise a toast to the wizened faces,
Who's sacrifice lies in forgotten places,
Thanks be to all whether in shadow or known,
For allowing me a land I can call my own.




 

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Written by philkent (166 comments posted) 3rd August 2007
I liked this, kind of like an extension of the poems from the trenches in WW1. 
 
I'm guessing this is to do with the troubled history of an Island to the West of here but pointing out the sacrifices the old made and the debt later generations owe is pretty universal.

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 4th August 2007
You get your idea across well. I felt the rhyme overpowered the words once or twice but the rhythm held strong. Liked it. 
 
Phil

Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 5th August 2007
Worthy sentiments. 
 
Oli

Written by madeupname (18 comments posted) 5th August 2007
Thanks for the positive comments. It's really about all the people who have sacrificed blood, sweat and tears to lay down an easier path for us to walk. I wanted them to have the respect they deserve.

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