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I Wear a Halo
By rilLie
04 August 2007
this was inspired by a song I heard from a passing car... the line was.. "One thing is clear -- I wear a halo.. I wear a halo when you look at me." and I couldn't keep my mind off that particular part of that song... I still don't know what the title was, but this poem was inspired by it. =P

It's pretty short, but then again, it's the first non-cheesy-angst-whatever poem I've written in a while. ^^;

Hope you guys like it. :D

a/n: attack as you please. ^_______^

I swing our hands,
raise them to my face,
entwine our fingers,
and slow down my pace.

That light in your eyes,
I smile and see,
that I wear a halo
when you look at me.

<3

Reviews

Written by Phil (6681 comments posted) 4th August 2007
Really simple piece that worked well for me. Short, but I could see it. Liked a lot. 
 
Phil

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 4th August 2007
Agree with Phil. Lovely and simple- says a lot with few words.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 4th August 2007
thanks, guys. :D
Short and sweet, rilLie
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 5th August 2007
One of your very, very best. Excellent! 
 
Oli :)

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 5th August 2007
thanks so much. :)

Written by sampaguita (7 comments posted) 8th October 2007
short and sweet, now you've got me wondering who sang what song...this poem has prettified my day, as well as reminds me of me sometimes

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 9th October 2007
oh, thanks so much. :) I researched about it, and the title's Halo, by Bethany Joy Lenz. :D She's the actress who plays Hailey in One Tree Hill. Glad you enjoyed it~! :D

Written by AnimalCrackers (2 comments posted) 14th August 2008
i love it.  
short and simple and to the pooint. 
amazing. :grin

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