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Cormac and Becuma
By Bagheera
05 August 2007
On a recent trip to Ireland, I was able to take part in some of the activities organised to take place during the McDermott Clan Gathering.
The following verse is based on a family legend, dating from the 16th Century when the family were High Kings [ or "Ard Ri" ] in Tara, the largest of the Seven Kingdoms of Ancient Ireland

 

 

Cormac and Becuma

 


Out of the wild winter weather she came calling

Halt and lame, haggard and loathsome

Seeking sanctuary

High-born Cormac, Prince of Coolavin

High King at Tara, heard her cry

Granting, graciously

The boon the beldame begged

 

Drenched, dismal, frozen and forlorn

The Hag was hurried to the hearth

Bread was broken,

And warméd wine swiftly served

Scheming secretly

The sorceress sat, her true intent well-hidden

 

Day followed, and night: soon week, then month had flown

Cormac, considerate, courteous, had not the heart

To bid brazen Becuma begone!

Step by step she stole deeper into his demesne

From sleeping in the scullery, soon she saw

Her chance to charm her way

Into his bedchamber.

 

A chess-game challenge one morning she made

And each their side of the foursquare battlefield they sat

War was waged; men-at-arms, knights and nobles

Defending to the death the royal couple, king and queen

Each feint and foray the witch waged, could Cormac counter

From sunrise to sunset they strove for mastery

Under the blood-red sunset they battled in silence

 

Then Becuma, as the balance of the game went ’gainst her

With guile attempted Cormac to confound

And scenes fantastic all around did conjure

With which the High King’s vision she might cloud

As his attention faltered, the gameboard she then altered

“The game is mine!” Becuma cried

“You play me false!” Cormac replied

And stood, heart racing, reaching for his dagger’s hilt

 

Yet honour stayed his hand, and won the day

Courteous Cormac could not the false guest slay

“The game is yours, though falsely:

What forfeit must I therefore pay?”

And Becuma, triumphant, raised her arms

And spoke the words of her chosen charm:

 

A curse she laid on Cormac, his courtesy abusing

That he might ever and aye beholden be

To offer unstinted hospitality

To all who asked

“Oh, Cormac Roe! High King at Tara! Weep!

My curse shall beggar you, while others sleep

In the bed you have denied me!”

 

“No traveller may you turn away, no request refuse

Friend and foe alike shall learn,

And beat a broad path to your door

Friends at the fore gate, enemies in the entry hall

None may you deny, nor stay your hand

But give unstinting, forever and a day!”

 

Through the long, dark hours of the night, Cormac sat, silent

Hearth flames were close to cold, ashy death before he stirred

“Know, scarecrow, my solar is mine alone!

If thou wouldst share, the stone-flagged stairs now climb

To gain my bed, bold Becuma

The turret must be stormed!

 

And so she  crept from step to step

A sinister shadow, sneaking soundless, ever higher

Closer now the solar, and her goal:

Cormac’s kingly frame. Her one desire

To taste her victim’s royal blood,

She hastens onward, heeding not her doom

 

A careless foot placed on a certain stair

Releases a bouncing boulder, crashing, crushing

Doom-laden, death-bringing

Screaming, she stands, too shocked to flee

Sudden silence: she screams no more.

 

Reviews

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 5th August 2007
Enjoyed this Bagheera. It had a pretty racy rhythm to it that suited the subject. I loved: 
death-bringing (I learned somewhere that that sort of thing is called a kenning - is that right?) 
Good stuff. 
 
Phil

Written by Fledermaus (3248 comments posted) 6th August 2007
I somehow thought this was well written and suitable prose rather than poetry, but when one applies such a style, it is of course somewhere in between the two. 
This certainly echoes the atmosphere of an Irish myth. We have a hag, a curse, a king, a game of chess and most importantly the question as to how far one's hospitality should reach. If she truly placed that curse upon him, then I bet he did die the same night. 
 
Very good read.
Hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 6th August 2007
I really enjoyed this excellent write, bravo to you. 
Bernie

Written by Lizzy (790 comments posted) 6th August 2007
Enjoyed this. Thought it was well written and kept my interest. 
Lizzy

Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 7th August 2007
I enjoyed this - I liked the use of alliteration, very suited to the mythic content. Rhyme in addition, would have been overkill; the alliteration worked well on its own. Good stuff to declaim at a family party. 
 
Nothing like a good inventive curse. Did it beggar Cormac after her death?
Here, here
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 26th August 2007
I quite agree with the others. Some of the lines varied so much in length that I agree with Fledermaus. I also think this would have made an excellent story for children. It kept my interest and I really enjoyed the read. Well done Bagheera!

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