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Eros Corsicana
By andybyers
06 August 2007
Sat on a curb at the edge of the street
Sat on a street at the edge of the summer
All freckles and eloquence,
She took a deep breath
And in her hands held out her heart to me
"I love you," she whispered

I plunged the dagger with every barking laugh

It was years before I understood
My heart was Corsican twin to hers
When I saw the boy who didn't laugh
And felt the stabbing pains of wounds
Unsuspected
Ancient
Self-inflicted.

Reviews
Well done
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 6th August 2007
tightly structured, concrete and effective, with a clever metaphor as its heart. Liked it.

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 6th August 2007
Liked this too. This grabs a moment and unwinds it. With FP, effective. 
 
Phil.
Nice
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 7th August 2007
A lovely little piece.  
 
Love, regret, affection, nostalgia...all in a few lines. Clever without being affected. 
 
Oli  
 

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