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Goddess 2
By Fledermaus
08 August 2007
Sigh... How can I let her know I have a crush on her without risking to lose a friend? Embarassed

She touches the leaf with her little finger, and the fearsome green mouth closes. If the fingertip was an insect, it would have been doomed. We are up on a bridge in the greenhouse, a gallery lined with carnivorous plants. The botanical garden, what place could be more romantic? Here ancient trees stand along the canals, and narrow paths lead through a manmade jungle. Pools and streams lay hidden in the little forest, and from the murky water of their aquariums, exotic fish stare at the visitors.
Clouds escape from large steel pipes and give the greenhouses their moist atmosphere. The strangest creatures reach for the light. Enormous leafs float upon pools like boats. In this alien world plants eat animals.

She points at one of the bulbs the vegetable monsters uses to catch flies.
" It'd be nice to take a picture of."
I take my cellphone from my pocket and make a photograph. Then I look at her, and click again. The beauty of the plant is certainly great, but not as great as hers.
The day passes in the hortus, and we talk about tenthousand things, but mainly plants and flowers. I have not seen one that could compete with her though, yet I do not mention it.
Often she goes ahead, the adventurer. After all, she is the tombraider, the explorer. Tomboyish, yet feminine...
We explore every path, see every tree, and then leave this oasis for the business of the town. We walk past the medieval houses, the canals and the numerous museums.
The National Museum of Antiqueties is her favorite, for she is sort of an archeologist after all. We walk on, for I want to show her the very heart of the place, the old citadel.
We enter the alley that leads toward the building, and we can see the ancient walls upon the hill. The gate seems closed however.
Then a woman adresses us in English.
" The entrance is around the corner."
We laugh and thank her in Dutch. We are tourists, but not from abroad.
The view from the walls is splendid, and I look at her, as she enjoys the view. Her curly locks wave in the wind, worthy of another nice picture.

At last it's time. We walk back to the station, towards her train. All this time I haven't told her, haven't said what I intended to say. The last chance approaches, and I am confident that I can gather the courage to kiss her on the cheek before she leaves.
The train comes sooner than I anticipated and I walk with her to the doors. Now... But she jumps in and waves, out of my reach...

I walk to my own train and get in, wondering. Did she touch my hand intentionally when I closed the door of the greenhouse? Would she perhaps be wondering why I haven't kissed her too? Or is she just a friend, like all the other girls I know? Kissing on the first date was out of the question, but then came the second, and the third, and the tenth...

I scroll through the pictures on my phone, only to find out I didn't save them...

Reviews

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 8th August 2007
Nicely written. A real sense of place, but more importantly, indecision came through. I'm not going to dole out any advice - then I can't be blamed! (Although it is tempting to write something typically male - full of bravado and testosterone etc) 
 
Phil.
Hi Fledermaus
Written by jean.day (2364 comments posted) 9th August 2007
Well written and easy to empathise with. I'm glad I'm past that stage of courtship.  
 
What a shame about the lost photos. Sounds to me like she is worth pursuing. Do you write to her or email her? You could say something like this. "The train took you off so quickly I didn't have time to kiss you goodbye," and then see how she responds.

Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 9th August 2007
Agree with Jean and Phil, nicely written, and sad. 
 
Sorry you didn't manage to keep the photos, but I'm sure there'll be another meeting. 
Lizzy 
 

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 9th August 2007
Thanks Phil and Jean. 
I know that as a guy I should take the initiative, but then, it's scary, for I do like her a lot, not only as someone I fancy, but as a friend as well. I have thought of sending her an e-mail, but wouldn't that be rather a-romantic and cowardly? (although what you propose seems rather bold to me, Jean ;)
 
Well, she knows the url of greatwriting...

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 9th August 2007
Oh btw. Before anyone misinterprets that last line. No, she isn't a member... I just told her I like to write and she found out who I was rather quickly (probably because of the Dutch flag?).

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 9th August 2007
Thanks Lizzy. Oh yes, there'll certainly be another meeting. The question is just... As a friend, a girlfriend, or the same status quo?

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3563 comments posted) 10th August 2007
This is a bit of a peace offering, Batty.  
I hope it isn't signifcant that unconsciously you didn't save the photos,sometimes the unonscious knows more than the conscious [and sometimes it doesn't!!!] 
Pity though, it gave the piece a sad feel at the end. 
But I'm sure it will work out. I get the feeling you are both soul-mates from what you have said, 
 
"The botanical garden, what place could be more romantic? " 
Have to say, it wouldn't feature in my top ten, but then whatever floats your boat, and she seemed to enjoy the place, that's what I meant about soul-mates 
cheers 
Jane

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 10th August 2007
Thanks BBS. 
Who knows... On the other hand, I think I was just clumsy not to check them earlier. I hope you're right about us being soul-mates. 
:D 
 
The botanical garden is realy a nice place. It's rather old, so there's nature, science and a tiny bit of history all together :)

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