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Poetry
Solar Landscapes
By andybyers
12 August 2007
They held me down and giggled
It was over in a flash but felt like days
And how long is a day on the sun?
Sweating without mercy, light exposing every sin

They spent those evenings
grasping at bras
looking for any way out
of an innocence
    perennially protested

All quiet,
All encompassing,
All forgiving the forest loomed
    swallowed us up undigested
    raw, and weeping from every pore
It might have been Mars
It might have been death
    :it was neither
    :it was only respite
    :it was moments spent in misplaced
        unknown
            dis
located

We always came back
always came back
    for more

And more
    there always was
        Sweat
        and light unbounded

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Written by DressedInPoetry (23 comments posted) 22nd January 2008
Interesting thoughts. 
I like the way you actually dislocated the word "dislocated".  
The ideas in this are very intriguing.

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