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Driftwood

By Talisker

15 August 2007

His mother throws emails into the ether
Like bottled notes into a random sea
A tiny drop of concentrated hope
Diluted to a billionth in the very act

Desperation steals reason, yet
A human needs to do something
To feel the illusion of control
Over the relentless sea

In truth we are all driftwood
Bobbing on the swell of fate
Washed up at the whim of chance
Who knows where or when

Oli 15/08/07

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Written by Vulture (13 comments posted) 15th August 2007

Quite liked it, especially the first two lines of the last paragraph, which are really great.

Ian

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3449 comments posted) 15th August 2007

Isn't it strange, I thought the two lines picked out by Vulture were the weakest in the poem,a bit too "readers digest" for me. I really liked the second stanza.Good poetry is expressing a lot in a few words and those lines do just that and the metphor of diluting hope was a very powerful one and sadly true, too
Jane
P.S didn't your fellow countrymen, Travis, do a song on the same lines? It was in my head as I read this.

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Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 16th August 2007

I agree to a certain extent - but we needn't be driftwood. If we got up tomorrow and did something quite contrary to what we normally do. things could be so different - perhaps even exciting! Remember how I warned people of The Death Sentence:

SENTENCED

Is he who lacks vision, drive and ambition -
But prefers the imprisonment of tradition.

So don't become driftwood - if you can help it. I'm off to do something quite outrageous tonight! oh oh oh!

Written by Phil (6845 comments posted) 24th August 2007

Unlike you to be quite so didactic - but good to try different things and I think this worked well.

I don't know if this refers to a specific incident or not. If it does, I've clearly missed out on something.

ENjoyed.

Phil

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