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By maipenrai
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19 August 2007 |
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you are a rose
blackened by corruption,
the sweet smell of death
assaults my senses
with every smile you give. |
appealing
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 20th August 2007 | liked the sense appeal, but rose is cliche as metaphor;
with "every smile you give" sounds limp;
could it be re-written as this:
with "every bloom in sight"
hows it going, mai? | Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 21st August 2007 | Thanks Uche for your comments, things are going ok thanks, I am going to Northen Afghanistan at the end of the monthy working with a French Aid Agency called ACTED, I will be working as the Logistics/ Security Officer on a prog they have going in Fayrab Province, very isolated, extreamly poor part of the country but I worked for them before in the same area so got a good idea what to expect.
apart from that not a lot going on, how about you mate, how are things in the Delta??, strange ,I have never been to Nigeria yet have worked in/visited several countrys in the region.
Take Care Uche.
Bernie |
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