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By Talisker
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20 August 2007 |
I'm in the habit of using a little piece of till roll (the paper your receipt is printed on at the supermarket) to record words, thoughts and sights during a long shift behind the checkout at Tesco.
This is the result of yesterday's.
A boy almost killed
in a potato avalanche
A baby eats white buttons
from a Cinderella bowl
A prim maiden aunt
with meerkat mannerisms
This lady’s tummy is drum-tight
I see her spatchcocked
in the act of birthing
A delicate essence
all the way from the delicatessen
I hear this man with my eyes
I see his wife with my ears
I taste his steak with my fingers
A man in bowling shoes
reads the News of the World
Ringspun is the word
his tee-shirt screams
Clubcard – it’s amazing!
Organ transplant
and space travel
are amazing
That man is W.C. Fields
He’s looking for
his little chickadee
A little girl is all embraces
because mum is making
kidney soup tonight
Oli 20/08/07
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Well,
Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 22nd August 2007 | | as you say Oli, they are just fragments of your thoughts, but they don't make any sense when put together! | Sense?
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 22nd August 2007 | Why do they need to "make sense" when put together? Why does anything need to "make sense"?
Not everything is systemic, or designed to work together. Lots of things in life are random and I rather like this. When you look at the night sky, it is not arranged, has no meaning as such, but is still full of wonder and fascination.
"Tesserae" are small tiles which together make up a mosaic. The "tiles" I present here represent the random occurrences and sights of a busy Supermarket. Together, they make up a picture (to me) of a day at work.
These could have been presented as a series of mini-poems perhaps. But they are related to each other in time and space.
Thanks for the valid review Audrie.
Oli
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3563 comments posted) 22nd August 2007 | The next time I see one of the staff doing that I'll ask them if they're a poet.
On second thoughts this is Nottingham it would be a stupid question,it would probably be their lottery numbers.
I like the idea of literary tesserae. We went to Barcelona earlier and in Guell Park there are fabulous examples of that; up close just broken shards of tiles but stand back and the blocks of colour and wild patterns are breath taking.They didn't make any sense but they were beautiful and so were your tesserae in their own way.
Jane | Random & Spatchcock (Diseased)
Written by coosh (922 comments posted) 23rd August 2007 | | A great little collage of mini-events - it works extremely well, each one a wee story in itself. If only more Tesco staff paid such attention to their customers... | Hi Oli,
Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 23rd August 2007 | Hope I didn't hurt your feelings! I totally agree with you about the night sky. Did you see the meteorites a week or two ago? I didn't see streaks but little scarlet 'coals' flying across the sky, one after the other. Spellbinding!
As I said to BBS, poetry is defined, in the dictionary at least, as 'imaginative writing in rhythmic lines.' This is where I get stumped with 'modern poetry', there seems to be no rhythm in it, and I feel, if it is written as poetry, it should have some sort of scanning to it. It's probably an age thing, I'm behind the times!!
But maybe poetry should be redefinedin this day and age?
Cheers, audrie |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 24th August 2007 | Been away for a while, just trawling around. Came across this Oli and I like it very much. As much for its disparate but joined together nature as anything else. (I hope that makes sense) For me this is like a poetic collage. Works very well.
Phil |
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