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Hardwood Maple
By andybyers
27 August 2007
There crouched in all resilience
    in autopsy
    the dead snow rotting
    the birds back to peck its carcass

Fingertipped
unmittened blue
    the iron clank swing set chains up the hill
    not wanting to wait
Thunderstorms broken on the rocks
    but healing
        hungry

Locks picked by wind
    lifted from young eyes
        whispered the furnaced It:
        fat appled limbs
        frolic salt-stainery
        unshod field tipped tricycle
    So I listened
        believed

The sap ran down me
    mourning six-armed
        glazing the sun so I could eat it
            hot off the griddle,
            blue unending

Hardwood maple—
    bone-knotted
    tear-keyed
    blond-leafed
—learns to wait

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Written by Phil (6439 comments posted) 27th August 2007
I'll confess up front, I found this difficult. I liked the rhythms, but different readings gave different patterns. Lack of punctuation didn't help me to get a firm grasp. I guess that may have been deliberate though. This gave me many images and ideas - which the right ones are, I don't know.  
 
Really opaque poetry usually frustrates me - but there's something about this that draws me in. I'll come back for another go later.  
 
Phil

Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 27th August 2007
Phil -- there are no "right" ones. These are vessels. Fill them with you. :)

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