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By no1butClo
28 August 2007
Observational. Not my best, but i've been dry for a while. Another train poem.

A man
chews
his thumb-
nail on a train
flicking through
the script in his hands
far too fast, he takes
in only his own lines
turning down corners and
scanning, pencil-in-hand
he appears impatient, perhaps his
music isn’t fast enough; he
changes tracks. Background papers
spread about him, cross-referencing
is fast and furious. He builds people
from type-written characters, animates
one writer’s vision. (That’s all
I am). He gives up the seat
beside him to a smiling surfer
with a cell phone. He stares across
the aisle and out of the
window. “The fake sound of progress”
screams mutedly from his earphones.

A man chews his thumbnail on a train,
and thinks: make your
own world,
kid, this one’s just
a dead-
end
soap opera.

Reviews
So young...
Written by patterjack (1328 comments posted) 27th August 2007
... and so cynical !  
 
But I am glad your drought has broken. 
 
patterjack ( and happy birthday ! )
So wise...
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 28th August 2007
...and yet so young ! 
 
I have been dry for a while too - such a relief not to have to change the sheets each morning ! 
 
Hippo Bird Dog Two Ewes. 
 
Oli

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