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count the stars
By no1butClo
28 August 2007

I was feeling a bit rubbish one night during a course at an officer-training college I went on. It was different from all the other summer courses I've been on, apart from the fact that there was still a hill I could go to the top of and watch the stars, while everyone else was 'down the Pav' or in the Mess getting slightly sloshed. This appeared in the notebook I was using for daily orders... it must have been the word-faeries...


Count the stars
like they’re all you’ve got left,
those three abreast, girdling a sky
of mist and dusk and blue.

Make them last, savour each spark
of million-year-old hope,
'cause the heav’ns close at midnight,
vaulting you in, securing the night above your head.

Keep them in dreaming,
feel them burn into the
back of your eye,
let their scorch-marks guide you
‘til the other star rises.

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Written by Phil (6439 comments posted) 28th August 2007
Sadness and loneliness come through strongly in this. I particularly like the middle stanza. It reads almost like a folk song with the middle being the chorus. Liked it. 
 
Phil
Stars
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 3rd September 2007
are something I've always been fascinated by, their beauty, their distance, their colours, their patterns, their sheer age. Red giants, white dwarves, pulsars, fascinating. 
 
Liked your poem a lot, paticularly 'cause the heavens close at midnight'.

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