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FOR SALE
By josibug
28 August 2007

This is a poem in response to "which inanimate object describes you best?" It should really be in a box, in the style of an advert in the paper or newsagent's window, butI'm not able to do that here. Anyway, it's my first piece on this site so y'all tell me what you think. :)


FOR SALE. ONE BIRD CAGE,

fairly new. A little damaged
and used, once.

Mahogony brown and a medium

size- a good decorative piece,

you'll find, but just for show since

the bluebird flew. We used a key

but now it's lost to time, or space,

or clutter.

A nice ornament, in any case.

If you would like to meet me face

to face I'm sure a cost can be

arranged for this priceless find that

isn't worth much. Best offer or more

is all I ask for the ownership of this

bird cage; a little used, fairly damaged

and once new.

Reviews
nicely done
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 28th August 2007
Really can't find much to complain about in this piece! Just one formatting thing: if you want to get rid of the gaps between lines hold shift when you press enter, it always split up mine at first. 
 
I like the absent minded tone, it sort of drifts in and out of the thread, as if you forgot what you were talking about and had to be brought back with a pinch... 
 
keep writing josibug 
 
clo

Written by Phil (6435 comments posted) 28th August 2007
Yep, liked this too. I do wonder if it could be condensed a little; but that probably reflects my personal taste rather than any fault. 
 
Phil.

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