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holiday
By no1butClo
03 September 2007

Expandable? Possibly. All comments welcome as usual, tell me what you think!

(There's been far too much travelling this summer)


It takes time to adjust
when things move so quickly overhead.
Clouds and weather spinning past
like postcodes, barely
still enough to take a snapshot,
make a memory.

Perhaps an evening’s dream
is all it takes to resolve this
great distance. A couple of hours
sat on a rock with pad
and Papermate watching the
tide recede, leaving rock pools,
in which children paddle splash
and fall; microcosmic disasters
in an unknown land.

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Written by Talisker (1321 comments posted) 3rd September 2007
Not sure about this as a whole. I like the rockpool analogy though, that could be expanded. 
 
I didn't really get the clouds and weather like postcodes. 
 
Oli :)

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