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girl on the rock
By no1butClo
03 September 2007

Always loved this idea, in fact, stole the theme from something patterjack wrote a long time ago...

hope you like it


Shadows lengthen. They grow
in the shrinking presence of the sun
stretching out into sticks and string,
then spreading with grace across the floor
in effortless puppetry.

This umbral high-tide brings a chill
to the Girl on the rock. Without movement
her skin acknowledges the lack of light;
not even the horse flies on her limbs decide to stir
so still she has been, watching.

Watching her sunset – for it is hers –
and waiting for the fairy-tale
thunder-clouds to cover the sky
and cast her into abys-like black
away from prying eyes,

where she can at last
uncoil her arms, unwind
her hair, and throw back
a glance of golden-green before
the depths close on her tail.

Reviews
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Written by patterjack (1430 comments posted) 2nd September 2007
I think that this is of rather more import than the jocularTail if that is the one you meant . 
 
Will email comments -- but correct spelling of abys 
 
patterjack

Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 3rd September 2007
Lovely 
Lizzy
Little mermaid
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 3rd September 2007
Ever so umbral! 
 
Not abysmal, in spite of the missing "s" - a nice bit of fluff, unless there is a deep significance which escapes me. 
 
Oli

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