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Non-Fiction
The Subway and I, don't clash
By William87
03 September 2007
Hi Guys!

Basically, I wanted to write something in another category but didn't quite get what 'non-fiction' meant? Just something that's "not" fiction? So basically I just wrote something diary like...

Not sure if it's interesting or not, but here goes.
  I guess I could've written alot more about it. But I feel, that I wrote enough.

/Kind regards, William - Comments are as always welcome.

p.s. What I might be insecure about is if the title works, within the english language? What I mean by the title is that; I and the subway get along.

p.p.s - I can see myself struggling with the present time and the past time, in writing form though. Going through this myself.

The Subway and I don’t clash
 The Subway. I never actually thought that it was such a nice and interesting place, well as long as the station is comfortable, clean and organized.
  I ran into some very interesting people today while working; I work as a delivery boy or you may call me a “walking ad”, basically I wear a huge vest that says “Metro”. It’s a daily newspaper.
 

I get up
5 AM and get home at about 11:30. It’s my first job. I actually liked it, maybe cause I been so isolated lately, so alone, and suddenly I am in female company, and that’s the best mood boost I can get. I work with some nice people at least, and the other “Walking Ads” from the other daily papers also work close by.
 

I think what I liked the most was that the people that I made eye contact with mostly smiled at me, it feels good, I smiled back naturally. 
 

As a nervous kind of guy I am of course very self-aware, it’s a bit of a pain as usual, but It doesn’t control me and neither does my anxiety. I am very worried that the woman, that me and this other guy we work with doesn’t like me though, everyone has to, how could they not like me? Sure I can be pretty transparent at times but I’m generally a very nice person.
 

I was very comfortable. I haven’t been that in a while. Staying inside at home can get a bit tedious sometimes.
 Working at the subway station, I am something that helps other people. It’s obviously easier to take the paper i'm offering rather than the one in the pile, and they seem to like me greeting them. I only greet those who reach for a paper though, I call it “ A paper greet “ take a paper and you get a nice greet from me.  
  And I guess this might feel a bit cocky but walking in the uniform like that makes me feel very secure about myself. It gives me a set identity, I know what I am at that moment and I know what my purpose is. It feels great. I haven’t got much more to say about this really. It was my first day. Tomorrow is my second, let’s hope it’s as good. 

/Your dearest paperboy

Reviews
HI William
Written by jean.day (2327 comments posted) 4th September 2007
I really like this. Non-fiction means that you are writing about something that really heppened. 
 
In this, you tell us so much more about yourself and your thoughts - and it comes across as honest and vulnerable. In so much of your writing, you are imagining things that you have had no experience with, and it comes across like that.  
 
Your sentence structure in this is a bit wrong - lots of long sentences should be several smaller ones. For instance the sentence that starts I am very worried that the woman... You should put a full stop after me and then start another sentence.  
 
This sort of writing is called stream of consciousness. You are just writing out your thoughts as you have them.  
 
I'm glad you only greet people who come to buy a paper, as we have a man in our town who sells a paper that is put out by and for the unemployed called the Big Issue. This man shouts across the road "Hello, How are you?" to one and all as we walk by - and it is very intimidating. Especially when he starts swearing if we don't greet him back and go to buy his paper.  
 
I hope you continue to like your job and meet some nice women as a result.

Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 4th September 2007
I agree with Jean. This sounds more natural than your fiction. 
 
I see from your profile that you and I are the same age. I've been scolded by English teachers in the past for writing something "too old" for me. I now try to stay away from writing main characters with more life experience than I have, because I can't make it convincing. This piece works because it sounds very honest. 
 
~Claire

Written by johniebg (553 comments posted) 8th September 2007
This was very good. I am not sure whether your perspective in this is for real, if so you sound incredibly naive. However this is the strength of your non-fiction - which by the way was a delightful sequence of thought proceses. 
 
Whether this style is manufactured or just you it is invinately readable. You should pop out and beg, borrow or ummn loan (or buy) a copy of Belle De Jour (a non fiction book) - it is the diary of a London call girl and in some ways similar in its honest account of thought. 
 
Good stuff. Looking forward to more but do not rush it. An audience will soon turn off if quality is substituted with quantity.

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