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By RegisteredGhost
03 September 2007
I'm not sure of an introduction, I was thinking of branching the poem out a bit but I'm not even sure I like it as it stands. Constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.

On the page in the battlefield
words jockey for position
helmets gleam in the midday sun
exclamation points at the ready
adjectives race to the fore
shining horns held high
knocking nouns from their places
prepositional phrases daisy-chain
so their horses prance across the page
while insisting tunic-garbed verbs go first
pronouns march in smug satisfaction
to the drumbeats of selfless fragments
as adverbs guard the rear from erasure.

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Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 5th September 2007
Well, it's sort of clever - but I'm always suspicious of writing about writing. Perhaps a little cold - even with the metaphor - to fuly engage. 
 
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