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Out of Camelot
By maipenrai
04 September 2007
I remember well
the days of my youth
many years ago
yet still fresh in my mind.

fair maidens swooned
as we approached
Castle or Village,
young or old
rich or poor
for who could resist
a Knight so bold.

an honour, a privilege
to ride with Arthur
Out of Camelot,
to fight the Dragons in their lair
my sword swift and sure
no fear had I at Camelot.

on return to the Castle Keep
comely wenches for me to adore,
I loved them all
each and everyone,
I truly thank them for
giving comfort to such
a lonely Knight as I.

alas, those days have gone,
my sword as wilted with the
passing of the years
yet I still remember
riding Out of Camelot.

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Out of Camelot
Written by Josie (2823 comments posted) 4th September 2007
What an interesting subject you have written on. Quite unusual. Was looking at comely wenches (peasants I suppose) what someone of very high birth (lords, dukes, earls or barons) did when they were away from their families? Well, I guess they did. Things never change. I know others may not agree with me, but to me, your interesting poem reads like prose broken up. The lack of capital letters starting new lines or even paragraphs, makes this seem even more so to me.
Hi
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 5th September 2007
Josie thank you for you comments and for taking the time. 
Bernie

Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 5th September 2007
I hope the wilting is purely figurative! 
 
I liked this, but I can't decide whether it's straight narrative or metaphorical. 
 
Phil.
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 6th September 2007
Thanks Phil, it's a straight narrative. 
Bernie

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 1st December 2007
I'd expect Arthur's knights to die young and glorious :p  
Nice poem.

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