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| The Right Kind Of Wrong--Chapter 5 | |
| By Dark_Angel | ||
| 05 September 2007 | ||
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Aiden Saturday, 11:30pm Mrs. Pierson pulled into my drive. She was steamed at me and Scottie. “Out! Both of you!” When I got out, she grabbed my ear and literally dragged me to my front door. She started beating on it. “JOHNNY!” Scott was giving me an apologetic look. My dad opened the door, rubbing the sleep out of his eyes. “Hmm?” She shoved me into him. “YOUR… your… DOG of a son had his hands on MY baby!” “Mom, he’s not like a dog. More like a… panther.” She winked at me. Her mom glared at her. Dad sighed. “Where at this time?” “Wal*Mart parking lot! Of all places!” Dad shot me a stern look. “C’mon, Aiden.” He grabbed my shoulder and pulled me inside. “I’m really sorry, Sarah.” Dad closed the door and turned to me. “A parking lot?” I looked down and nodded. “With that Masterson girl?” I nodded again. Out of nowhere, he hugged me. “Son, I’ve never been so proud.” “Scotty doesn’t know that Fiona and me…” I pulled Scottie’s blue razor out of my pocket and looked on the screen. A guy’s ass popped up. I felt my muscles tense up. I flipped it open. [This next part gets confusing, so the person speaking is in brackets. They’ll be scattered throughout the story. If you don’t wanna use them, you don’t have to. They’ll usually be in scenes where more than 2 people are talking, or if two people of the same sex are talking. But don’t get all bitchy cause they’re there!] [Aiden] “Who the fuck is this?!” [Luci] “Um… Scott…ie?” [Aiden] “Luc…i?” [Luci] “What the fuck are you doing with Scottie’s phone?!” [Aiden] “Uh…” [Luci] “Where is she?!” [Aiden] “With her mom…?” [Luci] “Where are you?!” [Aiden] “My… house?” [Luci] “Why do you have her phone?!” [Aiden] “She forgot it.” [Luci] “GET HER!” [Aiden] “Are… you okay?” She sighed. I heard her crying. [Luci] “Aiden, it’s just so unfair! Things were perfect between me and Cole and I had to go and fuck--” [Aiden] “Luc, unless you’re gonna say ‘somebody else’, I’m not interested.” [Luci] “What the fuck do you mean you’re ‘not interested’?!” [Aiden] “Call Scottie!” [Luci] “I DID! YOU answered!” [Aiden] “Ahh! Don’t yell at me!” [Luci] “I’M NOT YELLING!” [Phone] “No, we’re never gonna quit. Ain’t nothin’ wrong with it, just actin’ like we’re animals…” [Aiden answers, holding both phones up to his ears, but neither girl knows he’s talking to the other] [Aiden] “Hello?” [Luci] “Aiden, we’re past that!” [Scottie] “Hey, baby.” [Aiden] “Hey, honey.” [Luci] “Honey? What?!” [Aiden] “Scottie. Not you.” [Scottie] “Scottie what?” [Luci] “You’re talkin to Scottie?!” [Aiden] “Yeah…” [Scottie] “Yeah, what?” [Luci] “”Let me talk to Scottie!” [Aiden] “Ah! Calm down!” [Scottie] “Baby, I’m calm…” [Luci] “Let me talk to her!” I hung up Scottie’s phone. [Aiden] “Scott, hon, where are you?” “Home. I’m on the house phone.” “Ah, okay. I have your cell.” “Yeah, I know. Can you bring it by later?” “I’ll bring it tomorrow, okay?” “Alright. I’m sorry about Mom. Are you in trouble?” “Nah… Dad doesn’t really care.” “Has anybody called me?” “Luci… By the way, who’s ass pops up when she calls you?” She laughed. “Jared Leto’s. It’s a joke, baby.” “I don’t much care for it.” “Honey, it’s just a joke.” “It’s still a guy’s ass on your phone.” She sighed. “I’ll change it, alright?” There was an awkward pause. “I love you.” “I love you, too. What’d Luci want?” “Somethin’ about her and Cole breakin’ up.” “What?! What happened?!” “Christ, babe, I don’t know.” She sighed. “Aiden, I’ll call you tomorrow. I’ve gotta call Luci.” I heard her phone click as she hung up. I put her phone back in my pocket. “Aiden?” I looked up. “Yeah, Dad?” “Make sure you get that homework done before you go to work tomorrow if you plan on going out tomorrow night.” “Yes, sir.” I sat down on the couch and flipped on the TV. Cops was on. “Aiden!” Carley ran out of the back bedroom and ran over to me. I pulled her up on the couch by me. “Heya, kid.” She crawled up in my lap and laid her head on my stomach. Carley was my little sister. She was only about 18 months old. Within about 2 minutes, she was asleep. I stretched out on the couch and closed my eyes…
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