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Poetry
Cleveland 1996
By andybyers
05 September 2007
he rose from her
lifting all but his sweat
at her urging
    she turned over, pillaring
and she instructed:
"maybe you should
fuck me
like an animal"
       i know
       i saw
       i was there
so he
fucked her
like an animal
    then it was my turn

later, she watched

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Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 5th September 2007
I found this pretty brutal - and not for the use of profanities. A little like being slapped. If that's what you were aiming for - you certainly achieved the effect. Not one to like as such - but certainly recognise its power. 
 
Phil.

Written by andybyers (176 comments posted) 5th September 2007
I don't think I really had a qualified reaction in mind. To me the sensation is like standing in a burning summer sun... something almost unbearable about it, but so fundamentally satisfying that you can't turn away. I was in kind of a strange mood when scribbled it down... I remember it was in the wake of reading work by Jim Morrison. Some of his imagery was extremely stark and I've always envied his honesty.

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