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She has a skylight
By andybyers
06 September 2007
She has a skylight.
Invites me over.
We gaze up at it.
Daylight streaming;
    bright blue sky, relentless

She says,
“Sometimes I sleep out here,
    just to look up at it.”
And I say,
“You’ll have to invite me over
    sometime
    I’d like to see that.”

She never did.
Not me, anyway.
I wonder what eyes
    saw what constellations
    through that sweat-fogged eye.

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Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 5th September 2007
Time to move on Andy! Plenty more fish and all that. 
 
Liked this. 
 
Phil.

Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 6th September 2007
Phil! Where the soul moves on, there is no art. :)

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3295 comments posted) 6th September 2007
"Where the soul moves on, there is no art". 
 
Wow, just think of all the angst-ridden poetry we'd be saved from; present company excepted. :-)

Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 6th September 2007
Oh, it wasn't angst; nothing so high-minded. It was unrequited lust, I'm afraid. But point taken. :)

Written by wannabeawriter (8 comments posted) 9th September 2007
This was really good! 
I especially liked the passage of time by the change of tense in the third paragraph. (Stanza?) 
 
Very, very visual because I thought of New York as the location and even though you couldnt see the city (within the poem) I figured that she would have picked the dwelling specifically FOR the skylight-in order to be able to HAVE one little spot in her 'world' where she could always look up at the sky and leave the crush of the city. 
 
And then again I may be reading too much into it but then thats the purpose of a great poem yes?  
Not to just to read and admire a well written line here and there but to have it touch the reader both emotionally and imaginativly so that occassionally throughoutt he following days at odd moments, they'll go back and think of it. 

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