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Poetry
Severed
By andybyers
06 September 2007
Padge packing in this jukebox hullabaloo
Padge packing in this Crisco-slippy moment
Padge packing, and all is well
Padge packing up a severed limb that was our life

There’s the train
What’s the province?
You don’t have to tell me, no
But maybe we could say hello sometime
Don’t forget me.  Yeah, sure, I’ll write

As idly said, this home don’t miss the master

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Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 6th September 2007
You may have to provide an interpretation of padge packing for me. 
 
Phil

Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 6th September 2007
Someone named Padge putting clothes and keepsakes in a suitcase. :)

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 7th September 2007
Doh! How thick am I? 
 
Anyway, at least I understand it now. Not one that does it for me - this time. I've enjoyed yours very much of late. Perhaps the specific nature of referring to an individual distances the reader. 
 
Maybe others will read differently and get more out. I'm sure you'll do more that I do connect with. I've sort of tuned in with your style of late; it usually suits the way I process things. 
 
Keep them coming. 
 
Phil 
 

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