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By michelle
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06 September 2007 |
For ANDRE
The wait is over,
You have finally given me the certainty of the uncertainty,
And i am left to wander this earth alone,
I am lost, i am angry, i am hurt, i am gulity.
Why have you abandoned me?
Don't you see the irony,
The lies that have kept us together,
yet are the cause of this separation,
the separation of my heart from my soul,
My soul ripped apart,
as i watch my heart shatter,
I am in desperation,
I cannot be alone,
yet i am now.
I did not see this coming darling,
I never knew such a perfect love was not meant to be,
But how could it be,
Is it she,or is it he?
Was i too young,or were you too old?
Now i will never know.
But how could you allow such things to cloud my hopes,my dreams of a future with you?
What have i done to not deserve your love?
I have tried,
I have tried to love you, to hold you, to keep you,
All i wanted, needed,
Was you.
For the bitterness of my tears,
the shuddering of my body,
and the kill of my soul,
In the name of Love,
I couldnt possibly enter the gates of hell. |
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Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 6th September 2007 | I feel a little like a voyeur reading this. Seems written for an audience of one - not an open cummunity. Feel free to disregard my comments - though I try hard with poetry, I'm certainly no expert.
This seems so riddled with highly tuned angst that it is very hard to see past it. I wonder if a little time would give you the required distance to look a little dispassionately at your words - and sooth your soul.
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Written by wannabeawriter (8 comments posted) 9th September 2007 | I agree with Phil. This really seems meant for an audience of one.
But since it is in the community......
I Need (from April this year) and ......And I Am Left (from this month) seem to me like they form a complete story.
It also seems to be a story full of pain.
I got alot of powerful frustrated feeling from both.
Very sad (but that was the intent yes?)
If this was based on reality (and few poetry is not) I hope you heal.
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