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Poetry
One Heart
By tornlove09
07 September 2007
I wrote this poem for the last meeting of a support group I was in recently

One Heart

By Chloe Amitin

 

 

Our bond is powerful

We share one heart

 

One heart that is filled

With strength, love and pain

Our experiences unite us as one

 

Its hard to forget what

Brought us here, for me

It has been months

For others it has been years

 

We feel each other’s emotions

In a way I never thought possible

Together we are unstoppable

 

We will always share

One heart

 

Our strength is powerful

We have overcome

Our love is endless

It’s true and pure

Our pain varies

But together

We will always

Share one heart.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 7th September 2007
A better structure than the last, but for me a little less impact. I guess this is a personal one for you. The trick, I suppose is to communicate your feelings so that they are felt by the reader. 
 
I liked the idea of one heart. 
 
Phil.

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 7th September 2007
Incidentally, blue is not so easy to read on screen. I'd stick to black.

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