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By tornlove09
07 September 2007
This is one of my favorites that I have written recently. Enjoy!

Feels like i'm on life support

I know I’m here

But im not really sure

 

Numbness surrounds

Its time to endure

 

You said nothing

You took my hand

Together we walked

To never land

 

I didn’t want it

I told you so

You muted my words

And wouldn’t let go

 

You left me,

My body hurt

The tears came running

Nothing ever would be worse

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Hello
Written by Faerieanna (25 comments posted) 13th September 2007
This is upsetting. I hope it doesn't mean what I think it does?.. 
 
Extremely effective writing, all the more distressing for the contrast between the innocence and trust suggested by: 
"Together we walked 
To never land" and the rest of the poem. 
 
Uncomfortable reading. 
 
Take care, 
 
Anna x 
 
 

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