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Suing the gods
By Fledermaus
09 September 2007
I sue the one called Amor
Clumsiest of Olympos
Yes, that myopic young lad
I challenge the god Eros

I accuse him before Zeus
The lord of the sky, great king
I sue the white sea-foam's son
It's his satire I now sing

I doubt the lad's archery
Hand unsteady, bad his aim
He doesn't know how to shoot
That's the thing I hereby claim

Take his bow and arrows, Zeus
For his hands are too unskilled
Give them to brave Apollo
For too many tears are spilled

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Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 9th September 2007
Having a little go at Eros (Greek: Ἔρως;) who was "the primordial god of lust, love, and intercourse; he was also worshipped as a fertility deity". I'm not sure that everyone who comes to this website wants to see his bow and arrows removed! ha ha. Watch out: He has his arrow ready and poised to go at you Fledermaus.

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 9th September 2007
I liked this, a clever idea and generally well written. One or two lines seem a little incongruous with the overall style: 
 
 
Yes, that myopic young lad 
He doesn't know how to shoot 
A bit too conversational compared to the rest? 
 
Enjoyed it. 
 
Phil.

Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 10th September 2007
Ok batty, but not your best ;)

Written by Fledermaus (3486 comments posted) 11th September 2007
Thanks Josie, Phil and Oli :)

Written by Hellcat (63 comments posted) 4th January 2008
I agree with Phil - this is a clever lil piece. Well done.

Written by Fledermaus (3486 comments posted) 4th January 2008
Thanks Hellcat. Seems Eros should learn to shoot eh?

Written by Hellcat (63 comments posted) 4th January 2008
Lol, indeed. I hope he gets it right next time, eh?

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