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Where is Heaven?
By andybyers
11 September 2007
Where is Heaven?
Silently the trees point

The milestones of Heaven—
Here is one of them:
That first unsheltered glimpse
of another soul
    fragile and frail
       at your mercy
Here divides the road

Whither Heaven?
Seek the trees.

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Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 11th September 2007
I find with your poetry that I tune in and out. There's more meant in this that meets the eye. Beginning end and most of the middle are clear and linked. The line: 'Here divides the road,' breaks (for me) the whole thing and shatters flow and meaning. I can't see the link in that line to the rest. 
 
I've read comments from you before about each reader taking what they want from your work and that is fine by you. I suspect you intend something specific from each piece of work but at the same time there is a deliberate vagueness. I wonder if you'd have a wider (and more appreciative) audience if you included a few more clues. I'm not saying poetry should be easy; it should exercise the grey matter, but I'm sometimes left feeling a little dissatisfied by my lack of insight. I hope I'm not simply thick - and if I'm honest, I don't think I am. 
 
Having said all that, I do look forward to reading your work. But as I sometimes get frustrated by crossword clues that try to be a little too clever and over-reach, I can be left frustrated by reading.  
 
Sorry about the ramble. I always look out for your work and spend a lot of time thinking about your words - which is a compliment - often I read, comment, move on - and I guess it was about time I gave a fuller general review. 
 
Phil 
 
I like it =]
Written by Dark_Angel (53 comments posted) 21st September 2007
Man... really getting into your work. Like I've prolly set before, I suck at reviewing, but I try to just let people know what I thought, and well, I liked it =]

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