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The Chelsea Twins
By gedbackland
12 September 2007

Walk to School

The Chelsea Twins

 

Travelling to school in the four by four

Their little feet never touched the floor

So the Chocco Pops served up by mater

Weren’t used for energy (and so stored for later) 

 

Their seat belts they got tighter

As the Chelsea twins got no lighter

Sat on leather for half a mile

Up the hill they travelled in style

 

Then one day it happened outside the school gates

In front of their teachers in front of their mates

They squeezed out the car on this windy day

Then wobbled a bit, before rolling away.

 

They rolled and bounced, beach balls in blue

Mother gave chase but what could she do

And teachers and friends held back their grins

At the sight of mum and the bouncing twins

 

Through the park they passed without fuss

Then across the road (just missing a bus)

Then out of sight to the next town

Bouncing up high then floating on down

 

If you see two balloons passing your way

It’ll be these twins who were blown away

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The Chelsea Twins
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 12th September 2007
Very funny and children will like this. You lost the rhythm in the second verse and I really think you should work on this and put it right. I have an idea that teachers come to this website and use material in classes. They may notice this so quickly put it right. One other thing: Why have you done your poem in double line spacing? Single with indentations for rhyming is normal for poetry. A very good start and I'm so glad to have another children's poet to join me. Now - - - your turn to criticize mine. ha ha

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