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DILEMMA
By JohnnyD
12 September 2007

DILEMMA

 

Sometimes I wonder

Sometimes I shudder

Sometimes I wish

Should I also give in?

Just like millions have

And kill my dreams too?

 

Not, the one to give up so easily

I am fighting a war

A war within and against the world

Who will ultimately win the war?

The world or me

So my wish and dream would come true too?

 

I may be all alone

Going against the world

I wonder how long will I last

Or else give in, to be like others?

The war continues day and night

And so does my dilemma!

 


Johnny D

29th August 2007

 

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Feel the same way!
Written by Aurora (57 comments posted) 12th September 2007
If you have a dream you should never let go! Do what you have to in order to survive but anything else should come after your dream! A friend of mine always used to say "Reach for the moon, if you fall you'll land on a star! 
 
I like the macro approach to this poem, it isn't your job or family etc that is holding you back rather you are looking at the overall world being against you. 
 
Really like this poem and find it easy to understand where you're coming from! 
 
Aurora
Your dreams
Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 12th September 2007
Johnny: My advice is this: If your dreams are good ambitions that you feel you should fulfil, then don't give them up. Everyone is entitled to have something to aim for in life. As for yur poem, my honest opinion: It is a bit ragged. Look at the length of lines. There doesn't seem to be any conformity or style. I think you could do better, if I am honest - and you know I am, not hurtful. Best wishes . . . . Josie

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