Contains a little adult language
The monkey sits and chitter chatter shits,
his soft black digits tap tap tap
tapping on typewriter keys.
You chained him there, tap tap tapping
and now the dribble of a frenetic monkey
in Brownian motion soaks into your synapses
and all your rational debate
has been reduced to so much fucking bollocks
and all the words you want are cascading
over the cliff edge of your tongue
only to founder unspoken.
His chitter chatter jabber wakes you
at 2am, sluggish and spit-soaked and you are hanging,
words choked back,
hemp-bound to the keyboard
churning out drivel for the monkey.
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hi
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 14th September 2007 |
First three lines good, I liked them,
the rest not so good, I did not like them.
Bernie |
Amused
Written by fellpony (1720 comments posted) 14th September 2007 |
Mm, there are some whose work deserves this one - not all, thank God, though. I don't entirely subscribe to the theory of the "infinite number of monkeys" having the ability to type the works of Shakespeare. The odd word maybe, but little more.
Hemp-bound to the keyboard is a nicely ambiguous line. This made me smile, albeit wryly. |
I like it Elli
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 14th September 2007 |
As Woody Allen would say:
"Pithy. Yes, it hath pith"
Oli  |
Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 14th September 2007 |
I think an infinite number of monkeys would probably produce an infinite amount of crap.
I like it too, especially:
and all your rational debate
has been reduced to so much fucking bollocks
Didn't know you did adult language Elli. Almost like hearing your grandma swear!
Phil |
Hi Elli
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 15th September 2007 |
Nice to see your work back here again. I hope you are well and truely settled into your new house.
I loved your choice of words. My thoughts about what it all means are probably wrong but - I think you are talking about the endless mindless reports, essays, whatever, that you (or anyone else) is required to do, which you feel are such a waste of effort, but are none the less required, and time consuming and it all seems such a waste of time. |
Written by coosh (923 comments posted) 15th September 2007 |
What is the point of the "infinite number of monkeys" thing? We already know what Shakespeare looks like - be more interesting if they came up with something original, like a thesis on David Attenborough, or PG Tips.
Loved the nihilism of all this and the onomatopoeia - could see "Chitter Chatter Shit" on a T-shirt, with a suitable cartoon. Enjoyed it. |
Evening
Written by Sinnerman_Pfank (17 comments posted) 15th September 2007 |
I like this also. There's an energy and "earthiness" to the writing. Brownian motion? Nice. (you can get a Nobel prize for that!)
As for monkeys, here's my tuppence worth. There's a poem by Lucio which includes the lines;
Life is brief, but art is longer
So the sages say in sooth
Nothing could be worse or wronger
than to doubt this ancient truth
Endless volumes, larger, fatter
Prove man's intellectual climb
But in essence it's a matter
Just of having lots of time
Give me half a dozen monkeys
Set them to the lettered keys
And instruct these simian flunkies
Just to hit them as they please
Lo! the anthropoid plebians
Toiling at their careless plan
Would in course of countless aeons
Duplicate the works of man..
So, with an infite number of monkeys you'd get the entire works of Shakespeare, in the time it takes them to strike the number of characters contained therein (+ every other work ever written, or to be written, of equivalent or shorter length!)
A more "interesting" question is how many monkeys would it take so that the probablity of reproducing the works of shakespeare in that number of key strokes is, (say) 50%?....or maybe not!
Sinnerman
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Written by Livinginanattic (473 comments posted) 16th September 2007 |
Got mixed feelings about this one Elli. I liked most of the 2nd stanza and the way you brought in the adult language was very funny. On the other hand I couldn't take to your use of onomatopoeia. It just wasn't for me. Obviously a matter of taste, judging by the other reviews!
Ben |
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