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The Three Gifts
By Josie
15 September 2007

I am extremely nervous about putting this in the story section of GW.  It is my first story and you will know where I obtained the ideas for the three gifts from.  So, fingers crossed that I'm not driven off GW by "normal" storytellers - here goes - - -


The THREE GIFTS

FAITH, HOPE AND LOVE
 

FAITH


A child set out along life’s path.  The first people he met were his parents.  They taught him so many things in life, and, naturally, he believed everything he was told, for, after all, if he couldn’t believe them, who could he believe?  They gave him his first important gift in life:  FAITH.  It came shining bright, wrapped in layers of pure, soft silk.  His experience of life was yet to come, and it was only from this experience that would know whether this precious gift was the best gift in his world.  The parents assured the child, from all their loving actions, that they would always be there for him, and he, naturally felt safe and loved, with the faith that what they conveyed would be constant. 


However, one morning the dark clouds blew into his little world.  Firstly he noticed that his parents were cold towards each other; then they didn’t have the patience that they once had with him and finally, trying to sleep, he heard loud claps of thunder in his infant world.   His little heart pounded to the sound of loud shouting from below his nursery.  Between the storms were quiet periods, calm periods, a peculiar stillness in his world.  One day the laughter in his life stopped.  Tears were his companion – tears, and uncontrollable sobbing.  His parents went their separate ways.


HOPE 


The second gift which was bestowed on the child was the gift of hope.  This came from quite an unexpected quarter:  his school.  In fact, it came from his teacher. 

 

The child had been led to believe that by passing the 11 plus examination, the door to opportunity onto a better life would be open to him.  Failure of that examination would mean condemnation to a life of menial toil.  He was told that the gift of hope was available, but only to those who worked and passed this examination.  He went through practice tests:  “If one man could row the English Channel in 6 hours, how many men would it take to row the channel in 2 hours?” etc.    He wondered whether these things would really matter in life, and how would they affect his goals in life?   Perhaps one man had only one arm?  Perhaps he was old and the others were young.  These things were never mentioned in the test question.   His wonderings soon ceased, and the number of men rowing the English Channel soon faded into insignificance. 


He failed the exam, and the gift of hope was removed and he found himself sat in a classroom with other failures.  Perhaps they weren't exactly "failures" though.  Perhaps they were slow learners, late developers or lived in a part of the country where there weren't so many grammar schools to go round.  These things were of small importance to the Minister of Education at the time, though. 

Encouragement was also a gift that was taken from him.  The girls in his class were taught how to iron handkerchiefs, turning one edge down and ironing embroidery on the back.  They were taught how to make their own school shorts and cookery aprons.  Boys were taught the practical crafts of woodwork and gardening.  So, whilst picking out the weeds from the school garden one day, he decided to do something about it.  He went to his form mistress and explained that he wanted a better life, and yes, he knew that homework was something given to grammar school boys, but could he have some too?  She gave him the homework and also lots of encouragement. 

One day this kindly teacher brought from the bottom of her classroom drawer a small box, completely covered with golden paper, such as the small boy had never dreamed of.  This, said the teacher, is my gift to you.  It is only small, but it will serve you well in life.  This is my gift of HOPE.  Don't let anyone take this from you.

 LOVE 

The last gift came unexpectedly and much later in life.  Now established in his career and living in a country far from home, he was involved in arranging a private function:  the firm’s annual dinner/dance.  Dances were things which didn’t normally come into his normal world for he always felt he had “two left feet”.  However, serving on the committee would keep him busy and away from the dance floor. 

The event soon came and people started to arrive.  The bar opened and the music started to play.  In they came in ones, twos and small groups.  Sitting idly with friends, glancing around the room, a vision of loveliness came into his eyes.  At first he didn’t pay much attention, but soon found that his eyes returned more and more to this particular vision.  One dance led to two, then to nights out.  One evening, quite unexpectedly, she arrived with a box.  “You may think this is nothing” said she, “but this box contains my LOVE for you and this you may keep forever.”

 

With these three gifts, the man was able to live a fulfilled and happy life for:

 

FAITH taught him that good can overcome evil and that the sun can shine even through a rainstorm in life.  Faith is trusting in yourself enough to know that whatever happens in life, and even when things go wrong, you will make the best of them and go forward to better things.

 

HOPE taught him not to give up on himself.  It taught him not to accept failure as a word in his vocabulary, but not closing his eyes to the difficulties that life would present to him.  He learnt that doors in life never close completely, but lead to new doors which can be opened  onto better things.   He learnt to tell himself that “If I fail now, I have not failed forever.”

 

Of  LOVE he learnt wisely:  “Love is patient, love is kind.  It does not envy and does not boast.  It not rude or self-seeking.  It is not angered and keeps no record of right or wrong.  It doesn’t delight in evil but rejoices in truth.”  Where there is knowledge, this will come and pass, but true love will last forever.

 

The man still keeps his boxes:  FAITH, HOPE AND LOVE – but the box he considers the greatest of the three is the box containing -

                                       

                                                
LOve






copyright 2007 
 

Reviews

Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 15th September 2007
A nice moral piece, no need to worry about putting it up in the story section. 
Since it has no real characters or plot it is difficult to comment on, but it makes a nice read.
Thanks Asfer
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 15th September 2007
I;m not sure that I meant it to be a moral piece. It is just that we all have these gifts in life I suppose. Some elements of the story are true - especially the "vision of loveliness". How my husband laughed at that! (But it was true, naturally). You can actually comment on things without real characters - see the guidelines below. Maybe the title drew you into reading this - or perhaps it was because you saw my name in a "not normal for me" place. Thank you for your review anyway.

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 20th September 2007
Sorry to be coming to this late Josie. I'm slowly working my way up the short story board and stopped here. 
 
I thought you wrote this very well. It had a certain style that moved the story forward really well. Almost a 'read aloud' style. 
 
Difficult to pull off without sounding trite, but I thought this worked very well. I enjoyed it. 
 
Good to see you move out of your comfort zone. Exciting to try something different. 
 
Phil.

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