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Elegy of Summer's End
By Talisker
18 September 2007
Another seasonal repost with a few tweaks.

Forgive me.

Oli

Soft summer breezes, redolent and light,

Of endless afternoons, and dozy dreams,

Now yield to Autumn’s cool extending night,

And daytime sun casts milky, feeble beams.

 

The garden which delighted in its prime,

Emblazoned thus with blooms in every hue,

Surrenders ineluctably to time,

To sleep and dream of Springtide’s flush anew.

 

Behold!  the rowan’s fruit of coppery red,

A blessing for the weary feathered throng,

For as the Summer maiden goes to bed,

Cruel Winter brings her dearth before too long.

 

House martins see the passing year in stars,

And for the balmy tropics soon depart,

Their empty, clinging nests appear as scars,

Encumbrance to my world weary heart.

 

The boughs which once were verdantly replete,

Now sacrifice their leaves before the wind,

And soon an ochre carpet pads my feet,

Denuding, thus the branches left behind.

 

So thus we find ourselves on natures arc,

The cusp of seasons tempering our cheer,

Careering forth toward harsh winter dark,

The waning of another hoary year.

 

As antidote to seasonal despair,

I sally forth with bulbs of daffodil,

And as each meets the earth I say a prayer,

Its golden bloom will find me breathing still.

 

Oli (18/09/06)

Reviews
With thanks to Josie
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 18th September 2007
For editing and artistic comment. 
 
Oli

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 18th September 2007
I really like this, but find it a little depressing. Not the piece really. I love the garden, and until this year, when I was hobbled, have always put a lot of effort in. While I love being there and fiddling around - it always reminds me of my mortality and I ask myself how many more seasons I'll see through - a fair few dozen, I hope. Renewal in nature is a double edged sword. While it tells me things go on forever, it also tells me things come to an end.  
 
Morbid? Probably. 
 
I'll get off the psychiatrist's couch now. 
 
Liked very much. 
 
Phil.
Lovely
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 18th September 2007
Oli, you said that prayer last year too, and you'll be saying another next year too I hope. I see that it is "catching" as now Phil is wondering the same thing. I'm afraid that Death comes when you least expect it. I'm lucky to still be here for certain. Your images, your personifications and everything in this poem was really lovely. Oh, I see that Phil found your poem a little depressing. Send him to the children's page where Autumn and Wind are playing games. I loved the way you described your carpet of leaves as an ochre carpet. I wouldn't have thought of that, but then in my poems the birds are shouting to people (and nobody else would write about such things as that) ha ha. "Nature's arc" - lovely. Well written.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 18th September 2007
You must have a big garden! By coincidence I went to Clumber Park today and had a similar seasonal experience but not being a poet it remained a well of unexpressed emotions, so reading this was a real cathartic joy. I didn't find it depressing at all but just naturally following natures cycle. OK maybe a little melancholy in places and  
"Their empty, clinging nests appear as scars,  
Encumbrance to my world weary heart"  
brought a lump to my throat but the ending saved the day and got me smiling again, so optomist, staking a claim in the future. 
Lovely stuff, and to think I nearly passed it over because it had the word elegy in it [bit highbrow for me] 
cheers 
jane 
 
 

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