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Primrose Path Of My Feelings
By Larnyx
19 September 2007

Hey there whoever chose to read this.

This particular piece of work isn't exactly cheerful.

I'd had what seemed the worst week of my life. And i still can't see the light at the end of the tunnel.

But my friends have told me its ok, so i thought it'd be good to post it.


enjoy!


Larnyx Achrabige



Primrose Path Of My Feelings

I don't know what I've done.
Or if I like this journey I've begun.
Somewhere back at the crossroads
My lifes path changed tracks.
Suddenly here I am all alone,
Heading off to parts unknown

I walk this primrose path
Of sunshine smiles and daily rhyming.
It's here I find my greatest depression.
Here where I know eternal crying.

Too hard to turn back.
Too scared to move on.
looking for shortcuts through the trees
to paths friends have gone.
The path of nettles, bindies, an imprisoned mess.
But at least there I find no loneliness.

I walk this primrose path
Of sunshine smiles and daily rhyming
It's here I find my greatest depression.
Here where I know eternal crying.

I stand and look at my life in pieces.
A disguised past of hidden lying.
I lay down bare of all,
left with secrets, regrets, alone dying.

I walk this primrose path.
Where above shine greatly the Stars.
Here I find my greatest depression.
Of eternally bleeding scars.

Reviews
Heartfelt
Written by alexis_grey (30 comments posted) 19th September 2007
I think that the emotions of this poem really shine through. I definately like this better than the story you were writing about blood.... 
 
Your writing really has improved greatly and I hope you continue to hone your skills in the future.  
 
From your buddy, 
 
Alexis 
 
P.S Cheer up.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 19th September 2007
Yep, do cheer up. 
 
So much to read, so little time. Afraid to say I gave up part way in. The rhyme and rhythm didn't suit my taste - a little trite. Only my reaction. Others may see this differently. All about taste I guess. 
 
Phil
Thanx
Written by Larnyx (6 comments posted) 19th September 2007
Dear Phil and Alexis 
Thankyou for your comments. 
I will try and cheer up. 
Phil, especially thanks to your comments. I guess I should've thought about rhyme and rhythm as this is a poem, oh well next time, I will try better, Thanks to you all, 
Larnyx 

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