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Written by Bambam (42 comments posted) 20th September 2007 |
| Short but sweet! :-) |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 20th September 2007 |
Hello Andy.
This is a pleasant enough little story but it’s actually 102 words (although i suppose that you may have added to it since the 100 word post), 103 if you count the one that you missed out of the first sentence.
Spring usually brought a downturn (IN) the fortunes of Peter’s shop.
All the best,
Steve.
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Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 20th September 2007 |
| Hmm, I've counted it twice and I got 100 on the button both times. Word also counted it as 100 when I was trimming the fat. You're right about the missing word, though. That would put it to at least 101. Mind you, I do see a way around that... |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 20th September 2007 |
Well now, there’s a funny thing.
When I noticed the missing word, I ran it through my word count to see if the piece was maybe 99, but as you know it told me 102.
So it seems that my word count counts dashes, well handy for when I’m next asked to knock out 80K.
I can feel a book coming on now.
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All the best,
Steve.
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Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 20th September 2007 |
What sort of crazy person checks other people's word counts?
Could you not find space in there to put the goddess's name? I assume it was Aphrodite. If you put Aphrodite instead of "the goddess" it would have saved a word.
Sweet story. |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 21st September 2007 |
A helpful crazy person with tooooo much time on his hands!
Here comes another book, - - - - - - - - .
All the best,
Steve.
I couldn't find a looney, but this one looks quite manic.  |
Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 21st September 2007 |
| Hi, Cat... actually, no, believe it or not, I couldn't. When I was trimming it down, I had to omit the name of the goddess (and some of her other characteristics) because the fragment is from a worldset not our own. She wasn't Aphrodite, but some analog of the parallel world. I didn't have leave in 100 words to explain away the difference and I wanted to leave some air of mystery, so I just opted for the generic "the goddess". Actually, I had something "Oriental" and unusual to Western sensibilities in mind. |
Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 21st September 2007 |
Er? Why is it in a parallel world? I found nothing in it that wasn't from this world?
Re cinnamon eyes. He had asked for a flower so what about heliotrope eyes? (bluish-violet) |
Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 21st September 2007 |
Well, no, not in a 100 words you wouldn't. In a 100 words, it had to be pretty basis (like "the goddess"). The girl who comes in originally had "lemon" eyes. Yellow ones. Re: heliotrope, yes, well, a hundred word set-up for a play on "flower" wasn't really the idea.  |
Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 21st September 2007 |
| Basis --> basic. Cripes, we could really use an edit button on these comments. |
Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 21st September 2007 |
| Lemon eyes? Now that really is a parallel universe |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 21st September 2007 |
Liked this Andy. In style it made me think of one or two of Stephen King's scene settings. Short, but has a bit of depth. Parallel universe? Not that important for the snippet - for me anyway.
Phil |
Wow =]
Written by Dark_Angel (53 comments posted) 22nd September 2007 |
I agree with the SK comment. Being a huge fan, I totally saw a connection. I've commented on a bunch of your work now (duh), and I've enjoyed all of it.
Great work =] |
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