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Haunted
By echelon*mindfreak
23 September 2007
Chapter 1



"It doesnt look like no comfy home"
"Babe, its not spose to." Blake said
"Its deserted, shit for brains." I laughed at Jared's 'comment'
"Very funny babe, lets go in."  I put my arm around his waist, he put his around mine.
"hell no" Shay scowled
"its just a haunted houes, do it for me babe"  Blake got on his knees and kissed her feet.
"No Blake.."
"Well I agree with Shayla."  Ashley backed away.
"C'mon, theres 4 guys here, were not gonna let anything get you girls. (Blake)
"Yea and there's three of us...I'll do it if I get a body guard." Ashley clung to James' arm.
"Of course I'll be your body guard." James smiled.
"This house is awesomely creepy."  Jared kneeled down and picked up a little figurine of an angel.  Both the wings were gone and the eyes, erorded out?
"Weird huh,...(to my darling beloved wife)" He read the writing on the bottom. "I say lets go the fuck in....I've been waiting on Madonna and Brittney Spears here for 30 minutes."  Jared guestured towards Ashley and Shay.
"hey!, we are not the ones who are evil and dark on the inside and find this shit cool...I mean look at it...the windows are busted out, the door slightly ajar." (Shay)
"And its saying to me, come in Jared...come in."
"Go paint your fingernails black!" Shay spat at Jared.
"Hey. you two cut it out."  I took Jared's hand. "If you p****s wont go in with em, then I will."
"I heard there are several murders that took place here...they say the bodies were mangled...to mangled to identufy...and that they were still alive." (blake)
"thats a crock of shit, you cant be as mangled as you say and be alive." Jared scowled.
"Im not goin in." Blake stepped back
"You wus, you were going to." Jared sighed
"All in favor we stay outside the house say 'I'" (Blake )  Everyone said hi except me and Jared. The guys surrendered to their girlfriends.
"Fine.....were goin by ourselves."  Jared sighed and looked at me.
"Dont go with em Amz!" Shay pleasded "Hes not worth losing your life."
I rolled my eyes. "Im so glad I dont have brothers." I muttered.  Me and Jared walked up to the house.
"You ready babe."
"Ready as I'll ever be."
Jared turned and thru his arms in the air.
"1 LAST KISS!" I giggled, he frenched me, bending me backwards.  I ran my fingers thry his silky black hair, the guys cheered.
"GO GET EM AMZ!" Ashley cheered.
We broke the kiss.  "Were comin bakc to get your asses if nothins in here!" Jared yelled.
"We'll be waiting!" Blake called after us. Jsmes winked at me. We always had this brother sister type relationship. We turned and went up the steps.
"Thats weird, doors closed."  Jared struggled with it.  I turned and took one last look at my surroundings.  The wind was howling, no sun, dark clouds hugged the navy sky.  the tall trees swayed in the wind, the door on the barn opened and slammed shut.
"Finally."  he got the door open.  i quickly grabbed his hand.
"You ok babe?"
"Yea...lets go.."  I stuttered.



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ANGELA!!
Written by Dark_Angel (53 comments posted) 22nd September 2007
I LOVE IT! KEEP FUCKING WRITING!!!

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