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Forever Friends
By ShouldKnowBetter
25 September 2007
A chance encounter on a freight train in the Depression.


The night sky was like a black canopy shot full with every bullet man ever fired. The full moon sat on the horizon, seeming so huge you could almost count the craters. On the flat, pale grey desert plain the only thing moving seemed to be the stretched straight body of the freight train, The massive black engine poured out a trailing plume of smoke, white in the silver light, and sparks that danced like fireflies.

 

The box cars clung to each other like a string of blind men playing follow my leader, their wheels counting out the rail joints with a mixed syncopation. The night owl, sliding by the length of them, took no notice of the stencilled lettering, or the fact the door to the twenty second car was cracked open. He never wondered what cargo was inside, where it came from or where it was bound.

 

“Well if you ever go to Huston, you better walk right

And you better not stagger and you better not fight

‘Cause the sheriff will arrest you, and he’ll carry you down

And you can bet your bottom dollar, you’re penitentiary bound

 

On the Midnight Special, shine her light on me

Oh the Midnight Special, shine her ever loving light on me.”

 

Rogers stirred, sat up and stared at the ragged man crouched in the other corner of the box car, not appreciating being woken from his fretful slumber.

 

“Hey, Mack. Trying to sleep here,” he cried out against the creaking and rattling and the wind at the gap of the door.

 

“The names not Mack,” came the cheery response. “It’s Jangles.”

 

“Well just cause we’re riding the midnight train doesn’t mean I want to hear you singing about.”

 

The man laughed, and changed his tune.

 

Freight train, freight train, going so fast

Freight train freight train, going so fast

Please don’t tell what train I’m on

They won’t know what route I’ve gone.”

 

Rogers took out his knife and let a shaft of moonlight, entering through the slats, fall on it. The man took the hint and fell silent, but, as Rogers slipped the blade back into his boot and moved to settle again, the voice spoke.

 

“Riding the rail, that’s the life. Don’t it make you feel good to be heading out of nowhere particular, into somewhere it might happen?”

 

“What exactly might happen?” Rogers called back irritably. “Things are bad all over, no reason to suppose anything goods going to happen anywhere.”

 

“You’ll be one of the dust bowlers then? Or maybe a city gent? One of them that didn’t throw yourself out of a window?”

 

“Lost my job, that’s for sure. Lost everything , if you must know. In fact, that’s what I’m heading away from. Creditors and prison.”

 

The man struggled to his feet and staggered across the car, fighting the lurches of its steady progress. He settled himself alongside Rogers, took out the makings of a cigarette and offered the pouch. As he hadn’t smoked in over a day, Rogers set aside his independence and settled for a yarn. Jangles took half a cigarette from behind his ear but waited politely before lighting it.

 

“Ah, nothing like a stogy to cement a friendship,” Jangles sighed, after they had both exhaled thin, blue smoke with relish.

 

“I’m not your friend,” Rogers growled. “Just a passing ships in the night. A man between business and bum.”

 

“Sure we’re friends. Any man that’s happy to talk and not bash my brains out, well, I call that man friend.”

 

“You must have a lot of friends.”

 

“A whole heap. All over. Easier to find than enemies.” Jangles checked the end of his cigarette and blew on it.

 

“They aren’t friends,” Rogers insisted. “Most would stab you in the back the moment their interests come first. When push comes to shove, it’s every man for himself.”

 

“Being for yourself don’t set you against others.”

 

“It’s a dog eat dog world. Money talks. You haven’t got any? You’re struck dumb.”

 

“You’ve just had a bad experience,” Jangles assured him, nodding as if it would convince. “You’ll see. Things will brighten up. You’ll get back on your feet again. If that’s what you’ve a mind to.”

 

Rogers checked the man from the corner of his eye. The clothes were shabby, but hard worn and serviceable. The beard was trimmed, the eyes fixed on some spot in space, blue as cornflowers and sparkling as spring water. The weather-beaten features spoke of a life spent away from some dim office.

 

“So, what disaster befell you then?” he asked.

 

Jangles turned to look at him and split a white toothed grin. “Disasters? There’s no real disasters in my life. I’m foot-loose and fancy free as a bird.”

 

“But, what were you before the Depression? Or, before you took to the road?”

 

“Why, I was what I am now. A free spirit. A gentleman of the road.”

 

“A bum?” 

 

“That too.”

 

“But you seem not an uneducated man. Why would you choose a life of poverty and deprivation?”

 

Jangles threw back his head and laughed, so hard Rogers felt some thing stir in him. Could have been resentment, or maybe anger, yet strangely most like embarrassment.

 

“I’m the richest man you’re likely to meet,” Jangles said with conviction. “See here, is it so hard to understand. I’m happy to live in God’s living room. Free to do as I please. Beholden to no man. Reliant only on my own wits.”

 

“But surely, don’t you crave the comforts of home. Regular meals. A loving wife and family? A bed to sleep in?”

 

“I eat as regular as survival, known many women and sired more kids than I know of. And what sweeter bed can there be but the bosom of Mother Nature herself. Look now, how do you feel about being here, right now? Heading towards dawn?”

 

“Depressed. Desperate. Fearful even, if you must know.”

 

Jangles leapt to his feet, crossed the car and kicked the slats of the wall, before turning and flinging his arms wide.

 

“But don’t you see. Why, who knows what adventures are to be had? What people we may meet. Why tomorrow, it’s just a fun day out.”

 

“No,” Rogers shouted. “Tomorrow we could get thrown off this train. Tomorrow we could be stranded in the desert. Tomorrow we could die of exposure.”

 

“Exposure? Sure, anything’s possible. Why, this train could come off the rails. A meteorite might fall out of the sky on my head. My heart might forget to beat. What’s the odds? Why go through life betting of the long shots?”

 

Rogers stood up too, determined to make his point.

 

“Okay. Okay. So come on, tell me. We’re standing in the desert with nothing in sight but the track in either direction. No trains going to stop. What you going to do then?”

 

Jangles swayed towards him and clapped hands on both his shoulders, gazing directly into his eyes.

 

“Why, I’d suggest we just walk on five hundred steps.”

 

“Five hundred step?” Rogers was temporarily bemused. “That good would that do? Where would five hundred steps take us?”

 

“Five hundred steps closer to somewhere better.”

 

Rogers looked into the glinting eyes and at the grinning face. It was infectious, he felt like laughing.

 

“And then what?”

 

“Why, then I’d suggest we just stroll five hundred more.”

 

Rogers did laugh.

 

“You’re crazy.”

 

Jangles danced to the door and wrenched it back on its runners. He made a gesture that encompassed the slice of panorama framed there.

 

“Take a look, my friend. There it is. Infinite possibilities. Whatever you want, it’s right out there. Fame and fortune, if that’s what you crave.”

 

“You really believe that?”

 

“Sure. You just have to want it bad enough. Have a little faith. Look on the bright side. Believe.”

 

Roger crossed to his side and looked out at the hugeness of the night desert.

 

“And this from a man who’s achieved nothing?”

 

“Ah,” said Jangles, suddenly serious. “There you’re wrong. I have everything I ever wanted to achieve. I just didn’t want what you did.”

 

This brought Rogers up with a jolt. It was a notion he couldn’t argue against. He looked into Jangles face and knew for certain sure it was true. He’d never met a man so at ease with himself, so content. The concept stirred something in him. Not the desire to be a bum, but the concept that life’s setbacks might not be the end of the world. That there might just be something in the idea of thinking positively instead of surrendering negatively.

 

“You know, Jangles, you might have a point.”

 

“Sure. That’s the way.”

 

“Maybe there is a chance for me in the next town.”

 

“And if not, for sure the next one.”

 

“You’ve done me a favour, Jangles. You’ve given me food for thought.”

 

“No. Thought is the food for your brain. Feed it well and feed it full.”

 

Rogers held out his hand and grinned, like he remembered he used to do. Jangles took it and shook it enthusiastically.”

 

“Friends.” said Jangles with conviction.

 

“Friends for life,” replied Rogers.

 

A night owl flew past them unnoticed and began to climb, seeking some last prey before it was too late. It soared away from the box cars and pulled up high, till the train was just a thin ghost crawling towards the East. Dawn cracked the horizon with the first glimmer of a new day, and the train headed straight into it.

   

Reviews

Written by Asferthecat (859 comments posted) 24th September 2007
I suppose its easier to admire a bum in America, where they don't sponge off the state. Over here we have too many happy bums with no ambition. 
Lovely descriptions in the first para, spoilt by a spag in the first sentence. - ever bullet. 
Strangely, there was no description of the interior of the car. I could not picture the scene. Was there a guttering candle? straw on the foor? shafts of moonlight shining through the broken door? 

Written by ShouldKnowBetter (13 comments posted) 25th September 2007
Thanks for the review Asfer, and the head up on that SPaG wich I have corrected.  
 
I guess if your imagination can't supply and image of the inside of the car than my style of writing won't suit you, 
 
:grin Cheers

Written by Asferthecat (859 comments posted) 25th September 2007
Come on SKB, you put things on this site for feedback. Why give such an unecessarily detailed description of a landscape, which we all find easy to imagine and none of a a box car in the 1930s which none of us have experienced.

Written by Bambam (42 comments posted) 25th September 2007
I liked it, the atmosphere, the glint of sunlight on the knife, the image of Jangles' eyes was great. Personally I didn't miss any comment about the interior of the box car, the dialogue between its occupants was more compelling. :-)
[I]au contraire....[/I]
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 25th September 2007
........ the economy of description (interior of boxcar) leaves it to the reader's imagination, and it worked for me! 
 
Loved the symbolism of the owl at the start and again at the end of the story, bringing everything 'full circle' 
 
The feeling of this is very much in line with the lyrics of a Danish folksong which I love, and which tells of "life on the road" I allow myself to translate one verse: 
 
The Knife-sharpener's springtime song 
 
Now the open roads are calling 
And my old shoes are foll of holes 
And I have carved my secret marker 
On a road sign near Holstebro 
I'll travel freely where each road takes me 
Forgotten now is winter's snow and gales 
I'll sharpen knives and I'll sharpen scissors 
And live on sunshine and Adam's Ale 
 
(Some of the English 'rhymes', I grant you, are a bit "forced") 
 
PS One reason I opened up this [and I'm glad I did!] was because I used the same title ('Forever 'Friends') for a piece myself [a long time ago!]  
If you want to compare, try rooting through my earlier offerings - one is under Short Stories (6 Oct 2005)

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 25th September 2007
As you're new here,a word of advice :- it's not a good idea to snipe at people who take the trouble to review. 
Cat has a point in commenting on the inconsistency in the style.You start off with vivid,graphic descriptions and then it stops. I noticed it too. I'm not saying it spoilt the story, it didn't but it's information for you. 
I think you could have cut straight to the box-car where the story starts. It was a dialougue driven piece which I thought you handled well. It was realistic and stayed true to the characters.It carried the plot lightly and drew us in. There were a few too many cliched phrases but that is easy to remedy; finding new [and colourful] ways of saying things add to character. Also the subtext was subtle and gave the piece more resonance  
Well argued and realilstic 
Jane 
 

Written by stevetroster (1600 comments posted) 25th September 2007
Hello Shouldknowbetter, and welcome. 
 
I didn't particularly care for this story -opposites attract- it's been done so many times before and needed an edge, something different to make it worth the ink. 
 
However, as we are all here to help each; 
 
In the opening scene, there are lots of things that seem to be something. 
“The full moon sat on the horizon, (seeming) so huge”  
“The only thing moving (seemed) to be the stretched straight body of the freight train, (full stop, not comma). 
 
Why not, “The only thing moving WAS the stretched straight body of the freight train.” 
 
“The night owl, sliding by the length of them”. Surely it would be the train sliding past the owl? 
 
“Well just cause we’re riding the midnight train doesn’t mean I want to hear you singing about.” (About what?) 
 
“You’ll be one of the dust bowlers then? Or maybe a city gent? One of them that didn’t throw yourself out of a window?” (3 question marks!!) 
Also: “One of them (third party) that didn’t throw yourself (first party) out of a window?” 
 
Perhaps: “You’ll be one of the dust bowlers then, or maybe a city gent? But one who decided not to throw himself out of a window!”  
 
Jangles took half a cigarette from behind his ear but waited politely before lighting it. “Ah, nothing like a stogy” (I believe that a stogy is a cigar, not a cigarette). 
 
“Just a passing ships (plural?) in the night. 
 
Rogers felt some thing (something?) stir in him. 
 
“(That) good would that do?” - WHAT good would that do? 
 
He looked into Jangles face and knew for certain sure (one or the other would suffice). 
 
All the best, 
Steve. 
 
:grin

Written by ShouldKnowBetter (13 comments posted) 26th September 2007
Asfer (Cat) 
 
Yes, you’re right about reviewing but my response was not intended to be a snub, rather an observation that I tend to be lean in descriptions on the basis that I believe everyone carries images in their memory that can be brought to the fore and I’m happy to allow that to stand without me trying to force on some other image. 
 
The reason for the variation in this story was that my intention was to treat it like a short film and so the start and conclusion are the equivalent of panning camera views, while the middle is the main scene. 
 
As to experiencing – I’ll bet you have seen at least one boxcar interior in a film. 
 
Bambam & Bagheera 
 
Thank you for your reviews, clearly you experienced what I was intending which is most encouraging. 
 
Jane 
 
Sorry you felt I was sniping, this in no way was my intention. I’m glad you enjoyed the story and apologise for any cliques, I agree it would be better to be more original. My only excuse is that dialogue should reflect how people actually speak and often they do use the familiar, which is cliqued. If I work this up I’ll try to be more inventive. 
 
Steve 
 
As you suggest it’s ‘horses for courses’. Thanks for the useful suggestions I will certainly review the story with these in mind. The only one I’d not agree with is the three questions in the dialogue. Again, I believe dialogue should reflect how the character actually speaks, without worrying about grammar or the niceties of presentation. 
 
Thank you all for taking the time and trouble and I will be seeking out your own work to return the favour. 
Hello - - -
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 15th December 2007
I must be last in line. I've enjoyed your story and the following reviews. I actually liked meeting the two men who seemed to have different values in life. In fact, one's values change a lot as you get older. When I was young I took off to the other side of Canada on one of CPAs very long trains. Three days and nights on one train, following a week on a ship. I could hear the whistle as I read your story. I would have gone along with Jangles at that stage of my life. I was off exploring and with an open mind ready to take what life threw at me. Now I find it comforting to go into my local town and see familiar faces around me and feel content with my life with family and friends around - just like Rogers. So I've enjoyed meeting these two characters knowing that many of us are made up of a bit of both.

Written by ShouldKnowBetter (13 comments posted) 19th December 2007
Hi Josie 
 
Thanks very nmuch for picking up on this story and kindly reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it and it evoked some pleasant memories for you.

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