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Drama Scripts
Two Poets; Define Love
By William87
25 September 2007
So I continued on my original Idea about two young poets.

I wrote the first piece yesterday (I think), which is posted in the short stories section. But as someone pointed out, it's more script like, so I placed this piece, here.
  I don't know what category it's supposed to be in. It's neither a comdey, or a drama.

/William

p.s. The text is rather quick & chaotic, but It sort of goes together with the way they dialogue.

Two Poets; Define Love

It is Thursday the 6th of December. The snow blows gracefully in the air, right onto both James’s and Harold’s faces. They both shiver as they bring out some blankets to sit on. They sit in the same gazebo as they always do, every Thursday, every each week. They are about to talk, on yet another, heavy topic; Love. Neither of them, ironically, has ever been in a relationship.

Harold: Brrr. It’s cold today!

James: Indeed!

Harold: You remember what the new topic was going to be?

James: I think—I think it was, about, relations?

Harold: Relations? I believe it was about-

James: Was it about hope?

Harold: No no, it wasn’t going to be about hope either.

James: I’ve lost hope. You figure it out.

Harold: You were close when you said relations, I think.

James: Was I?

Harold: Yes, well, close but still far away.

James: Sounds like love to me.

Harold: That’s it! Love!

James: Oh?

Harold: Yes. Love.

James: I’m not in the mood for love—

Harold: What do you mean?

James: I mean. I don’t have anything to say about it.

Harold: Nor do I, to be blunt. So, we switch subject?

James: I don’t want to leave anything out.

Harold: let’s drink some tea and think about it for a while.

James: Ok.

The two young poets pour up each other a cup of tea. They both look up the sky. Harold begins smiling and sort of taps his finger around his temple. James is too busy covering his eyes from the snow that continually keeps hitting his face. James closes his eyes—then reaching for his cup of tea, accidentally dipping his finger in the tea, burning his finger. He let’s out a heavy sigh, forcing the pain inwards, sucking on his finger, he seized his moment. He’s now just as dazed and taken by a deep concentration as Harold is.

And they begin… It’s all very chaotic, they just blur out things, quick, loose.

Harold: Isn’t love about being appreciated? Being thought about and depended on, in a more thoughtful and the most caring way.

James: When two people meet each others needs, Love occurs?

Harold: Or is it all physical? Lust?

James: Of course mankind must ensure its survival. Which we have. Alcohol brings people closer together than what you might think. But it’s in the incorrect way.

Harold: When two people meet and suddenly, somewhat look at each other in a special way—

James: It’s about feelings. Definitely. Sharing each others feelings?

Harold: Or does lust turn into love?

James: Lust & Love must be very close together for it to work.

Harold begins drawing letters on the bench.

Harold: L stands for Lust, U stands for urge, S for seized and T for—Uh-

James: You almost had it. It’s: L for Living, U for Urge- Just as you said, S for sensation and T for—

Harold: See? The last letter is tough.

James: And T for Tough?

Harold: Hm, maybe.

They both kind of, sing out- in separate turns, in a poetic kind of way. The meaning to the spelling of the word.

James: To love is to live, to live is to love. To love is to urge for someone. Love, can be or become a sensation. But it can also be tough?

Harold: Hm. Love is Lust, as Lust is Love, Lust is to urge for someone, an Urge for…Love? Seized, the moment love occurs, you’re seized?

James: on the other hand, Love cannot be defined…

Harold: It can be too many things.

James: Exactly.

Harold: It’s impossible to define something that can be so many things?

James: It’s like a chameleon it switches identity.

Harold: It—

James sighs and interrupts Harold.

James: Can we call it a night?

Harold: But it’s only 3 in the afternoon?

James: I need a break.

Harold: And do what, exactly? What can be better than this?

James: Not better, but easier. I’m going to the tavern.

Harold: To?

James: To-

Harold: To seek companionship? All this talk about love, eh, James?

James: No no, I was thinking I’d eat cherries till I drop.

Harold: Why not just a few beers?

James: I don’t drink.

Harold: Ah.

Harold: I think I’ll join you.

The two young poets stands up, shake their legs about. Pack their rug sacks with the blankets and cup’s. They walk away, again, without resolution…

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 29th September 2007
As this was posted in the comedy forum I thought it would be funnier. The two poets raised interesting philosophical points but the humour was too slight too register. The humour seemed to stem from the ironic fact that they had no experience of what they were talking about.This should have been made clear in the dialogue rather than being "told" this in the introduction. The revealed humour would have been funnier.I'll give you an example:- 
 
[two Irishmen arguing] 
Mick: "I bet I've slept with more women than you 
Pat: Rubbish, I bet you haven't 
Mick: Don't be daft, Pat, I must have slept with more than you. 
Pat: No Mick your'e wrong. In fact I bet I've slept with more than you. 
Mick: OK,Pat, I bet you a pound I've slept with more women than you. So tell me how many women have you slept with? 
Pat: Right, let me think. Ummm, it is just the one. 
Mick: Dammit, Pat you beat me after all. 
OK not the funniest gag but it explains their lack of experience with humour. 
cheers
Hello
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 3rd October 2007
 
 
Agreed with Jane. I didn't really find this funny. It seemed like two men who had lost themselves with a subject.  
Lust & Love ------- only use the ampersand (&) in the name of a company: eg Smith & Co. (only a little thing).

Written by William87 (30 comments posted) 4th October 2007
Ok I'm moving this to drama scripts. Thanks for reading it, both of you.  
 
I really didn't aim for a funny text. I just thought, It's not a drama either. 
 
It's hard placing texts in categories. And again I injured this text in placing it in the wrong category. 
 
-Moving this

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 15th October 2007
Ah yes, that subject. The silly thing is that English has just to few words for it (eventhough Dutch has ven less). Love means to many things and each of them is ill defined.  
Wittgenstein (or was it someone else?) had a good one too: Define 'game'. 
Yet love is an even nicer (but also more comlicated) one to think about, as people can feel it or believe in it, or not believe in it, or falsly believe in it and so on. I think you could write an entire play about it, perhaps even with a little more action showing things defined as love which clearly aren't :) 
Isn't it a nice exercise trying to define the undefinable?

Written by Jellybean (7 comments posted) 16th October 2007
OK....i think i get your aim now with these - do i call them scenes?!  
With the one about the meaning of life, i though; yep, that's a good beginning to an intersting play. But this one is definetely a debate.  
I liked it. I thought that the end was a little disapointing, but i see the reason for that end - there wasn't an answer, or the answer was too difficult, right? 
I think that lust is completely different to love. Lust is an on the spot sort of thing; in Romeo and Juliet, Romeo was lusting (is that a word?!) after Rosamind, but when he meets Juliet its Love. Love is just as deep as lust, but love lasts long after the lust has gone. Well, that's my opinion on it, anyway! 
 
Ellie 
xxx

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