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Poetry
Clay
By gutterkitty
25 September 2007
Haven't written in a while, so be kind :)

It was you who taught me
that this could not be scary;
that I could touch, and meet with skin
and not the licking flame.
And now that you are cool,
and run over me like water
I am finding rocks smoothen
with each movement that is given.
The edges of me
that were once sharp as knives,
erode into something softer,
and I am clay, pressed guiltily
with your fingerprints.
Fingers with tell-tale wrinkles,
wishing for the current to take them away.
And in my navel
a droplet of water waits,
as I think of soil and sand. And all those gifts
that slip between my fingers
when we part. And I am washed up,
make-up smudged,
to spend weeks emptying
clothing full of sand.

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Awesome
Written by Keller (21 comments posted) 27th September 2007
I love this, you really have captured a sensual feeling with this by leaving lots to the imagination and just putting in little tease words like 'skin' and 'navel'. 
 
Absolutely great. Only thing I would say is that perhaps the ending is a little clumsy in comparison to the rest? 
 
I love this piece, fantastically written!
Who says
Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 27th September 2007
that holiday romances don't last??? 
 
Loved this and I think the ending finishes it off nicely!

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