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Going to Grandma's - by Susannah, aged 2 1/4
By jean.day
27 September 2007
I don't really have anything to write about - but get withdrawal symptoms if I don't post something at least once a week. Since I always write up what happens when my grandchildren visit - and eventually I will put it all together into a book for them - I thought I would write something supposedly from Susannah's point of view.

Tomorrow, mummy says, we are going to Grandma and Grampa’s house. She knows how much I like to go there, but quite often when I ask if we can go she says no. Sometimes it is because they are going someplace else or are busy. Sometimes it is because Grandpa isn’t very well, and doesn’t want too much noise and fuss.

It was about a month since we last went. When we got there and stopped our car in the driveway and I got out, I felt a bit shy. I know that they like me, and I like them too, but it takes awhile for me to feel really comfortable. I forget a little bit in between, what they are like.

Grandma says she has had her hair made curly, like mine. She always goes on about how pleased she is that one of her grandchildren has curly hair. My daddy’s hair is very short and curly but my mummy’s hair is long and brown and straight. My grandma’s hair has been straight but not very long, but now she says it will be curly, just like mine. I wonder if I will know it is her. What if I don’t like the way she looks? I’ll have to be polite and smile and pretend even if I think she looks awful.

I do have fun at my Grandma’s house because she lets me do all sorts of things that my mummy doesn’t let me do - like rolling the grapefruits up and down the dining room table. She sits on one side and I sit on the other and we roll it back and forth and laugh and laugh. Mummy says it is wrong to play with food, but Grandma says at her house it is okay. Sometimes we play with tangerines too, and apples, but they don’t roll as well.

Best of all is going upstairs and looking in the cupboards and drawers. Grandma always puts things in there for me to find that are different - so I know that there will be a surprise. But she also keeps the things that I have found before that I like. I especially like the boxes with the little silver spoons in. It takes quite a time for me to open the boxes, and then the spoons are all any which way, and I have fun putting them in their little spoon shaped holes in the box. It is sort of like doing a jig saw but because it is spoons, it is different. Last time we had necklaces in the drawer and Grandma put a turquoise one around my neck and showed me what I looked like in the mirror. She wore a long one with black and blue and red beads on it.

Grandpa hasn’t been so well and his hair all fell out, but it is growing in again now. When I first saw him when it was all gone, I was scared of him, because he looked so different. But now he has a sort of fuzz on his head and looks better. He likes to read me stories and tell me jokes. Sometimes he teases me and I don’t know what to think. He pretends I am a dog and whistles for me. Mummy gets mad at him.

Food is a big thing when we go to Grandma’s. I am pretty fussy about my food, and my mummy is forever trying to make me eat things that I don’t want and don’t like. I like milk and would be perfectly happy just drinking milk and having a bit of cereal, but she makes all sorts of fancy things and then she gets very upset when I don’t like them. But at Grandma’s house we always have the same thing. Chicken and mashed potatoes and gravy and carrots. She makes the best mashed potatoes which are rich and creamy. She told me she puts lots of butter and milk in them, but I don’t think mummy knows that. But once when we went to visit, there was pasta instead, and I cried and cried. I had so looked forward to my special grandma potatoes, so mummy went and boiled some for me and mashed them. But it wasn’t the same.

Mummy talks about me and she thinks I don’t understand, but I do really. Just because I’m not able to talk all that well, she forgets that I can hear and know what she is saying. I know she thinks that I am allergic to something, because my nose is always running, and she is trying to find out what it is. For this month, she is keeping me away from milk and things like that - my favourites. She gives me some substitute milk made from soy, which I drink because after all, I have to have something, and I do get hungry, but it is not the same. And the mashed potatoes have to have substitute butter in them. I do my best, but it just isn’t nice when your favourite things are taken away. I am not to have milk, cheese, butter or yoghurt, or anything with any of them in. Mummy says I get grumpy, but wouldn’t you too, if you had to stop eating all your favourite things?

Grandma made me some special food last time I visited and she says she will make it again for tomorrow. She said she had it when she was a little girl. It is made out of peanut butter and cereal and has chocolate on top. I do like it very much, but mummy will only give me a tiny bit because she says it makes me hyper if I have too much sweet stuff.

We do lots of things - jigsaws, playing with the doll’s house, and the toy cooker and scales. And sometimes we play in the yard - and I throw the balls under the bushes so Grandma and Grandpa can go and fetch them. They do enjoy that.

But after lunch, when it is time for my nap, we get in the car and go home again. I don’t mind because I know that I have lots of nice things to play with at my house too, and Daddy will be home soon after we get back. And as much as I like seeing Grandma and Grandpa, I think it would be hard work trying to entertain them all day long.

 

Reviews
Hi Jean
Written by gshelme (152 comments posted) 27th September 2007
I really enjoyed this. Very clever to do it from a childs point of view, it worked well. I loved the last line.  
 
Gill :)
Hi Jean
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 27th September 2007
That third paragraph -- beginning Best of all... brought back some nostalgic moments for me . Won't take up your space here and now -- will email sometime . 
 
Very enjoyable  
 
patterjack

Written by Lizzy (793 comments posted) 27th September 2007
Enjoyed this Jean. 
I thought you got the voice of the child well. Liked the games she plays with you, and the fact that grandparents are allowed to be indulgent. 
Lizzy

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 27th September 2007
Yes, a great last line. Perhaps you should get withdrawal symptoms more often. 
 
All the best, 
Steve.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 27th September 2007
I think you really got into the mind-set of the child well and how their particular logic works. I'm sure you're right about her feeling she has to entertain grandparents.They like to feel important. There were a lot of sharp insights like that. It reminded me of "The Curious incident of the Dog in the Night" in the way that it was completely in the child's world, from that one perspective. I did think her unusually diplomatic :- 
"I’ll have to be polite and smile and pretend" 
I often find that age-group are shockingly and embarrassingly honest, but she obviously loves her grandma,bless her 
A very perceptive piece 
jane 
Thanks Gill, Brian, Lizzy, Steve and Jan
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 28th September 2007
The visitation is now over, and we had a good time. She didn't comment on my hair - but my daughter did - and she said she prefers it straight.  
 
The mashed potatoes went down a treat - and the peanut butter candy - but our main activity was knocking the apples off the trees with a broom. And playing the piano and singing.

Written by teddy (240 comments posted) 28th September 2007
Hi Jean,  
 
I read this over a cup of coffee this morning and smiled all the way through. When I got to the grandparents’ entertaining bit at the end I actually laughed.  
Adults often have a tendency to underestimate children’s perception of the world around them, but I felt it was very well captured in here.  
 
enjoyed this very much.  
 
Teddy 
Hello Jean
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 28th September 2007
I loved your story, and it seems that things are the same where you are as at my home. Last week I took the children for a walk, and they played hide and seek outside the church, which is by their home. We went into the church and at the back was a box of toys. Out they came and they were happy playing with "God's toys" for a bit. When it was time to go on I said to Jessica (who is 3): "Tidy up the toys. This is God's house. Leave it tidy." She suddenly looked dreadfully shy and her eyes were going all round the church, especially round the ceiling. "Is he here then?" said Jessica, thinking that we had crept into his house when he was out. I said "Yes, but he does have other houses." She said: "Oh well, he must be very rich then." Thought you would like this story as much as I enjoyed yours Jean.
Hi Jean
Written by Livinginanattic (456 comments posted) 28th September 2007
Enjoyed this. It brought back a few childhood memories. I could just picture her going through all the cupboards and drawers looking for the surprises. 
 
Cheers, 
Ben
Thanks Teddy, Josie and Ben
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 28th September 2007
I enjoyed your story Josie - thanks for including it.

Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 29th September 2007
A very enjoyable piece, Jean. I think what I like best about this is the mention of mashed potatoes, because I would crawl from Philadelphia all the way across Pennsylvania to Dubois, just for my grandmother's mashed potatoes. I was always disappointed if we ever had a meal at my grandparents' house without mashed potatoes. 
 
~Claire

Written by tpowell (105 comments posted) 29th September 2007
Hi Jean 
Really enjoyed this, it made me smile. I remember going to my grandparents as a small girl and the thing I loved best was getting the 'button box' out of the cupboard and sorting through all the different buttons. 
 
The box of spoons in your story brought all those memories back, sadly my gran has been dead for over 20 years but this reminded me so much of her - thank you 
 
Tracey

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 29th September 2007
My gran had a button box too - fantastic. 
 
Enjoyed this Jean. You seemed to capture Susannah's 'voie' really well - with humour and insight. The last line works really well. 
 
Phil
Thanks Claire, Tracey and Phil
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 29th September 2007
We had a button box at our house at home, too. I tried playing hide the button, with hotter and colder cues, with my 4 year old granddaughter, but she just couldn't help giving away the button's location straight away.

Written by coosh (863 comments posted) 4th October 2007
Enjoyed particularly the simplicity of the entertainment, as well as the last sentence. Via GW and elsewhere you must have compiled a fair amount of family-oriented memories - I hope they appreciate all your time and effort.

Written by sam_duke (19 comments posted) 12th October 2007
A very quaint picture nicely painted by the simplicity of the child's voice. I like it.
Thanks Coosh and Sam
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 12th October 2007
Yes, they do appreciate my work, I think. And they will appreciate it even more when I am dead, and they have something left of me to look back at.

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