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TIME
By audrie
28 September 2007



I was travelling on the Starship Enterprise when I wrote this!!


 

Circles in circles, bright spheres on spheres,
I'm lost in a time-warp surrounded by fears.

Rings of wide eyes all staring at me
But they look right through me, there's nothing to see.

Deep time or space time or time that's in me,
Where have I come from and what will I be?

Spiral on spiral of stars within stars,
Bright burning sun-flares or far off quasars.

'Where in this time scale of aeons of years
Does someone like me fit?' But nobody hears.

Orbit on orbit all spiralling down.
Into a black hole and time, as we know it...
Is gone.

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Time
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 28th September 2007
Yes, time is a very interesting subject. Travelling through time as in HG Wells "The Time Machine" has always fascinated me. I think you may have made a little mistake: But they looks right through me, there's nothing to see. 
(Easily corrected). An interesting piece of work Audrey.  

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 28th September 2007
I'd love to know what you were tripping on Audrie. ;)  
 
Yep, interesting. 
 
Phil.
I told
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 29th September 2007
you, Phil, I was tripping on the Starship Enterprise!! 
Good to be back. 
 
Yes, Josie, I put in an s when I shouldn't have, thanks. I zounds loike I wuz cummin up from zummerzet. I will edit it posthaste.
I come in peace
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 29th September 2007
It's poetry,Jim, but not as we know it 
Sounds like one of Kirk's speeches just before they beam up after laying waste to the planet 
cheers 
Jane
Oh,
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 29th September 2007
James T. Kirk, did I have the hots for him!!! 
no wonder I sounded intoxicated!

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