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My Little Gar-den!
By audrie
30 September 2007


  This is probably the silliest poem I've ever written. I did it when I got back from  a    holiday once and saw how much the plants had grown.

Feel free to slate it!!

Sow the little seed, plant the little plant,
Watch them grow in my little gar-den.
Cut the greeny grass, see the seasons pass,
Does your heart good to see things grow!

Prune the little trees, watch the busy bees
Buzzing round the flowers in my little gar-den.
Clip the hedgy high before it hits the sky.
My, how very quickly some things do grow!

It's growing up so tall, can't see the path at all,
More like a jungle in my little gar-den.
Oh, my aching back, my spine's about to crack,
Never knew how quickly these darn things grow!

Trunks of giant trees festooned with early peas,
Beanstalks made for Jack in my little gar-den.
Now the kids are lost, soon they'll be compost,
Animals are stalking through the things that grow!

Baboons come swinging past, a leopard's in the grass.
How did this happen to my little gar-den?
I hear the lion's roar, I see his huge great paw, I
I'm about to be eaten as I watch him grow!

I wake up with a start as my chair begins to part,
And I fall down with a bump in my little gar-den.
Everything is neat in the beds of peat...
Whew! Won't do my heart good to see things grow!

Now don't you grow another inch... you hear me?

Reviews
Your Gar-Den
Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 2nd October 2007
I can understand how your "Gar-den" could soon become a jungle Audrey. I think, though, that you would need to write a story into this poem, though, for children. You could say how when you came back you found a whole new community living in your garden because it had grown into a jungle, and then tell the story of the creatures living there.
Yes
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 5th October 2007
Josie, that is a point! But as I've said, poems are not my strong point. My short stories are very much better. 
 
I'm thinking of putting some of them into this section. If any children read the short stories section, would they let me know if they like them? 
 
There is one called 'Give the Devil his Due', which might be a warning to anyone wanting a quick 'fix'. 
 
audrie

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