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My Mother's Sun
By Toad
01 October 2007

* remember... "author" and "speaker" are seperate entities... my mother is alive and well


The day my mother died
I drove familiar highways
to walk along the beach
and to be beneath the moon

Our dog had died
the year before, so no one
shared the ride with me
or chased the sticks I threw

I did not need to cry
I just had to be alone.
The colors in the sky told me
the sun would come up soon

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Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 1st October 2007
It resonates. My mother is still very much alive as well (knock on wood), but I can certainly relate to the idea of seeking the familiar in times of loss. I think your hook here is the linking with the previous loss... there's something primal about the company of a dog. It seems like the last thing a human being could absolutely depend upon, and to lose it is to lose an anchor to contentment. To lose a mother is to lose the root of one's own being. The only thing left to hold onto is the world itself. Nicely and concisely summed up in a dozen lines.

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 2nd October 2007
I agree.

Written by Jellybean (7 comments posted) 2nd October 2007
I really liked reading this; i thought the idea of loss was portrayed well. I too liked the idea of the dog and agree with andybyers on that front. Well done!

Written by Toad (100 comments posted) 2nd October 2007
Thanks... I'm glad the dog bit worked. I liked the image of acting out the stick fetching ritual even though the dog is no longer with him.

Written by Phil (6681 comments posted) 2nd October 2007
I think Andy has just about said it all. The 'dog bit' was what tied it all together for me. 
 
Good stuff. 
 
Phil.

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