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Poetry
rachel
By no1butClo
02 October 2007
Why Rachel? I don't know, just one of those things I suppose...

Not sure where this came from really, glean from it and comment what you will, it just seemed like fun at the time.

Rachel, oh rachel.
I'm sitting on a bed,
but verything's already been said and
you're still at my window.

I mean, come on,
you know.

Everything's already been said.

Rachel, oh rachel.
I'm waiting by a door,
that will always be opened too soon,
but you're still at the window.

Perhaps, maybe,
I don't know.

It will always be opened too soon.

Rachel, oh rachel.
I'm flying on a plane,
you're falling through a window-pane.

No wait, don't go...
fool.

You're falling through a window-pane.

Reviews

Written by Jellybean (7 comments posted) 2nd October 2007
Well...i know little to nothing about poetry so you should probably ignore my comments.  
As a GCSE english student, from this i would take that Rachel was maybe your love, or a...I DON'T KNOW!!!  
I thought this was really random, and i'm too stupid to understand the finer details.  
Was this just a randomly written poem about nothing in perticular or are you trying to convey something to your readers?

Written by Livinginanattic (473 comments posted) 4th October 2007
Liked this, it's a little offbeat. It feels a bit like a song lyric to me. Have you tried putting it to music? 
 
Regards, 
Ben

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