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October 3
By Fledermaus
02 October 2007
October 3, 1574 Leyden was liberated by the 'Seabeggars', who are, depending on which side you're on either freedom fighters or a bunch of pirates... It's a local holiday in that town.

Steam drifted into the air. Slowly it crawled out of the cauldron and then dissolved in the wind. Diego leant over the boiling mashed potatoes and threw in the slices of carrot. Such strange food, these tubers. They were said to come from America and had been brought from there by the conquistadores. He knew the stories of the hardship and hunger that those men had endured, yet at least their adventures had paid off. His own adventure had stranded here, in a field under the cold and grey clouds of Holland. How much longer did they have to wait here?
For months they had besieged the city. The guards on the walls looked thinner and paler every day, almost as if they could collapse any moment. The spies brought reports that old people and children had already died of malnutrition and still, still those stubborn Dutchmen were unwilling to surrender. They had eaten all their animals, the straw in their stables, the bark of the trees and the grass, but they seemed to prefer starvation over defeat.

A few days ago hope had been near, for there were rumours the citizens were about to break. They had seen their sons and daughters die. They had burried their parents and knew that their own death was near. The spies had told how they had stumbled towards the city hall with the last strength they had and demanded that the mayor should surrender Leyden to the Spanish.

Thereupon, so the spies told, the mayor had grabbed his sword and offered it to the hungry people.
" If you are so desperate", he had said," Then chop off my arm and eat it."

That was the kind of man Pieter Adriaanszoon was. He would have himself cut in pieces and eaten rather than surrender to the duke of Alva...

Diego bent over the cauldron and sighed. How he longed for the blue skies of his native Andalusia, for the warmth of the sun and the smile of Spanish girls. Every day was colder and windier than the last and soon winter would arrive. Where he was concerned, the Dutch could keep their cold and miserable country. What did the king want with it? It was naught but swamps and polders...

Suddenly he heard a cry. One of the soldiers came running towards the camp.
" Flood!", he cried, " The land is flooding!"

He wasn't a moment too soon, for Diego could see how the water gushed towards them from the south. The speed was alarming, and he didn't wait for any orders. As quick as he could he ran towards his horse and mounted it. He didn't even care to saddle the steed, for it was as if God had commanded a new Great Flood. As fast as he could, he rode towards te dunes, and he saw he wasn't the only one who fled before the water. Around him, the soldiers broke off the siege and ran away in disarray.

---

The little girl looked at the merry-go-round and took a bite out of her cotton candy. The pink cloud stuck to her face and she smiled. She loved this day. There was no school and her daddy had just won her a teddybear. It was a very special day she knew, which had to do with a war a very long time ago, when people had fought about the city, until someone had destroyed the dikes so the Dutch soldiers could reach it by boat.
" What do we eat for dinner", she asked.
Her father laughed.
" Mashed potatoes of course."
" Why?"
" Because it is october 3."
" Oh yes... But why do people eat mashed potatoes at october 3?"
" When the Seabeggars came and chased the Spanish away, the hungry people came out of the city. They went to the Spanish camp and there they found a cauldron with mashed potatoes. It was the first food they had had in weeks, and hence we eat mashed potatoes every year..."
 

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3288 comments posted) 3rd October 2007
I know you are a bit of an historian and enjoy the subject. I'm not really a fan and if I feel that I'm being given a lesson dressed up as a story I tend to switch off, but this was done with the lightest touch and engaged me straight away. Iparticularly liked the way your characters were the "small" characters not the movers and shakers of history. It makes it so much more accessible. And by concentrating on just one or two we feel it as a real incident not some historical fact. I especially liked the way you ended with the mashed potatoe which took us back to the beginning. A really neat complete little tale. 
If you can make history interesting for me you can plait jam!! 
Great storytelling 
Jane
Hi Fledermaus
Written by jean.day (2253 comments posted) 4th October 2007
I agree with Jane that this was well told. I think telling history in small pockets using real people, as you often do, is the very best way.  
 
I'm interested about the carrots. Were they native to America too?  
 
I wonder if they ate the dead? I read a book about the siege of Leningrad where they supposedly ate their frozen dead dad, bit by bit.
Hello Fledermaus
Written by Josie (2721 comments posted) 4th October 2007
Ah! Here you are! Hiding away in the story cupboard Fledermaus! My word! What a good storyteller you are. Really, really good. How I enjoyed your story, and I do hope that you enjoyed your mashed potato. Do you have to live in Leyden to have it, or do lots of people have it? I can't put things better than Jane did. Well done!

Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 5th October 2007
Thanks very much for your kind compliments BBS, Jean and Josie. 
:) 
 
BBS: I deliberately chose a Spanish soldier as the main character, firstly for the reason you mention, that he is an ordinary person. Secondly because I wonder if anyone ould use such a guy as the main character for a story about this event. For the Spanish it's just one of their many wars and for the Dutch, the Spanish were usually the bad guys. :) 
 
Jean: The dish actually consists of mashed potatoes, carrots and onions. So that's why he put in the carrots. I don't think they ate eachother, for the story about the mayor is the only one which became famous and they did not eat him either. 
 
Josie: It's mainly celebrated in Leyden. Next to mashed potatoes they eat herring and white bread, for those were brought by the Seabeggars (don't know if that's the correct translation in English btw, for the Dutch name Watergeuzen is a corrupted version of French Gueux de Mer).

Written by fellpony (1569 comments posted) 5th October 2007
A well constructed tale Fledermaus and I enjoyed it very much.  
 
(The only (very very slight) niggle - probably because I've been watching too much telly and TV chef-ery - is that mashed potatoes don't boil - you boil the potatoes first then drain them and mash them afterwards. Boiling mashed potatoes makes a nasty burnt mess on the bottom of your cauldron, dear boy. If you had your soldier adding the carrots to the unmashed potatoes and mashing them later, I'd have no quarrel!)

Written by Asferthecat (824 comments posted) 5th October 2007
You have a gift for bringing history to life - your stuff should be in schools.

Written by Phil (6629 comments posted) 6th October 2007
A well told story Flermaus. Agree with everything Jane has posted, above. The sudden change in perspectiuve worked well. 
 
Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 7th October 2007
Thanks fellpony, asferthecat and Phil, 
 
fellpony: Realy? I never made it, but I'll pay attention next time :) 
Asferthecat: That'd be a dream job :) Writing history books. 
Phil: Thanks. LOL. Last october 3 I received my MA degree, and a classmate from Leyden who received hers as well was treated to dinner by her boyfriend that evening. They could hardly find a restaurant which served something else but mashed potatoes :D

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