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Poetry
Invisible
By Dove
06 October 2007
Teenage girls are the cruelest creatures in the world. They travel selective pacts, preying on members of rival pacts who are weaker or smaller. No member dares go against the group or they will find themselves kicked out, they then quickly become pray for others.
The teenage girl is unforgiving, often illogical and unreasonable. When no other prey is to be found the group will turn against one of it’s own, bulling, humiliating and abusing someone they once called “Friend”.




See the girl, she is here to day.
Look at her she’s real.
You and I ignore her,
We forget she thinks and feels.

“She’s a loner, she’s not one of us”
We have pushed her to the edge.
We never say hello to her,
We forget she’s even there.

She’s fading, she’s leaving.
She’s pressed against the wall
Soon she’ll sink right in,
Then she won’t be here at all.

Look at her, to day she is here,
Tomorrow she’ll be gone.


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Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 6th October 2007
An idea well expressed. I like the imperatives in the opening and penultimate lines and the way you finished. 
 
The middle eight lines (for me) were a little relentless in the way they listed things. I guess that could be the effect you were after. My personal taste would suggest a little more variation in delivery - but that is only personal taste. 
 
Liked it. 
 
Phil. 
 
It's not
Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 6th October 2007
just teenaged girls who are so destructive, the whole human race are capable of such cruelty. 
 
Why they are, I have no idea. I can only think they are lacking some brain cells, and are just plain ignorant of other people's feelings.

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 7th October 2007
Welcome to Great Writing. Your poem is true, Dove. Why do you think that people are cruel, one to another? Why, in particular are teenagers like this? More to the point, what do others do when they see this cruelty? Do they just stand by, or are they frightened of being the next victim if they act strongly against it? At one time, if we saw someone being kicked and injured by a gang, we would think nothing of going in to stop it, and if children saw an adult coming, they would immediately run away. Now people are frightened to do anything in case they are the next victim. So, what's your answer?

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