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Knight in White Satin
By gutterkitty
08 October 2007
I went to a costume party on Saturday night where the theme was song titles. It was a very surreal night and I tried to capture that feeling. I'm not sure about the capitals, should I get rid of them? Or just bin the whole thing?

A red Rollercoaster
runs into the room,
screams and arms
flying through the air.
Circles of colour linger
on pale arms and legs,
on the taut stomach
of an American Woman. A lone clock
runs past, distressed,
missing her pendulum. And Purple Rain
is playing pool with Scream,
umbrella discarded.
In the corner, a Hero in leotard
and gold cape
is kissing a bull, fingers searching his fur.
I watch as girls with broken wings
have their photograph taken
with a walrus,
watch men with lipstick and dresses
shrug when questioned why.
In my white satin and jeans
I could be almost normal,
but my words don’t slur enough,
my hips don’t roll invitingly.
My lips aren’t laced
with alcohol, and my song is barely known.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 8th October 2007
This pulled me into the hullaballoo (sp?) of the party really successfully and then counterpointed the noise and excitement with what seems to be your isolation within a busy crowd - not quite fitting in. The first six or seven lines work very well. 
 
Liked it. 
 
Phil.
Pick the group!
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 8th October 2007
Interesting thematically and well described .  
 
Nice ending -- broadens the theme out well . 
 
patterjack

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 8th October 2007
Where you the Knight in White Satin? If so, I think you were the wrong sort of night, although how you could go as night would be problematic, hopefully not with a full moon!! 
Thought it captured the chaos of the scene well and now that I read the end again I think I see the irony of the mispelt name, very clever. 
Jane

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 9th October 2007
Thanks for your comments. I was indeed the Knight in White Satin. My last name is Knight, but it is also intended to be ironic as the title. 
As for the introduction of myself to the piece, I guess what works for some doesn't work for others. For me it increases the sense of chaos by moving from a description of a scene to my place within it- almost like I'm taking it in. But I'll admit that sometimes it doesn't work.

Written by stevetroster (1600 comments posted) 9th October 2007
I do like the idea of using songs (Ambiguously) in a piece of writing. Some time ago I was toying with the idea of writing a historical fantasy piece using band names for the characters and events (Uriah - Jethro - Mott - a gay gentleman called Floyd - etc) and reading your poem has recindled my flame. 
So, back to your piece. Some wonderful images were cunjured (although I didn't get them all) and as for your song - how can anyone not know it? It was/is a classic!! 
 
All the best, 
Steve.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 12th October 2007
Maybe because nearly everyone at the party was under the age of 20? I only know it because of my mum really.  
Glad I could be of inspiration to you :P your idea sounds trippy but interesting. Could be very good if you pull it off.  
Thanks Steve.

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