Written during my creative writing group.
Not a reference in any way to the Nirvana song of the same name.
Box shreds. That’s all that’s left.
I had you kept,
wrote “mine” on the lid.
Put you on my shelf,
next to the heart-shaped box.
Where did you go?
You hadn’t claws enough
to escape. I gave you lovely things.
Sequins. Peaches
just ripe enough.
Love and the little bow
of my top lip.
I had you known.
Put your box in the sun.
Now there’s only shreds
and I wonder when you grew
knives enough to slice through wood
like an apple.
I guess
you escaped through the window,
the one I’d opened
so the light would touch so close,
uninterrupted by glass.
Where did you go,
where’s the shelf? Did you take it with you?
And the sun, I miss the sun. When did it
go dark?
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Ah Written by fellpony (1652 comments posted) 10th October 2007 |
that terrible thing called "possession". "Mine." An effective piece GK.
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Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 12th October 2007 |
thanks fellpony  |
Diggit Written by man_in_the_box (13 comments posted) 12th October 2007 |
| Wow I liked that a lot. I got a real sense of childhood curiosity and bewilderment. The way children develop obsessions for something once they declare it "mine". Loved the imagery too - "the little bow of my top lip". Beautiful. |
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 12th October 2007 |
| Thanks man_in_the_box. I didn't really think of it that way when I wrote it but it is sort of childlike in thought. I guess it's the kind of surprise that bowls you over so thoroughly that normal thought processes stop. Often the simplest things are the most difficult to comprehend. |
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